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 A excerpt from my new sory.r

Joined: Sat Jun 02, 2007 11:14 am
Posts: 45
Fri Jun 22, 2007 8:51 am
Prologue

Since the threat arose in the Carribean in the 2050s Australia has been a Vampire Free Zone, welcoming refugees from across the globe. Now The Resistance, a group of children ages 10-17 has fled there after the devastating defeat at The Battle of Cape Town. There they met the Prime Minister, who in turn told them they having the most experience were to lead an army into battle.



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Joined: Tue Jun 05, 2007 7:02 pm
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Fri Jun 22, 2007 4:58 pm
It sounds pretty interesting and unique- Please post more!

magic*esi



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Fri Jun 22, 2007 4:59 pm
I'm replying more because people will pay attention to threads with lots of replies!

magic*esi



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Fri Jun 22, 2007 4:59 pm
Post more! I hope people will read it! It sounds really good!

magic*esi



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Joined: Tue Jun 05, 2007 7:02 pm
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Fri Jun 22, 2007 4:59 pm
I like your story. It's written well. I want to read more.

magic*esi



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Joined: Tue Jun 05, 2007 7:02 pm
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Fri Jun 22, 2007 5:00 pm
You're a really great author!

magic*esi



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Joined: Tue Jun 05, 2007 7:02 pm
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Fri Jun 22, 2007 5:00 pm
You're an amazing writer! But, don't put too many statistics in your story.

magic*esi



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Joined: Tue Jun 05, 2007 7:02 pm
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Fri Jun 22, 2007 5:01 pm
I know that people say they prefer to read short stories- but your excerpt is too short!

magic*esi



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Joined: Tue Jun 05, 2007 7:02 pm
Posts: 958
Fri Jun 22, 2007 5:01 pm
Going along with my last message, could you please post more of your story?

magic*esi



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Joined: Tue Jun 05, 2007 7:02 pm
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Fri Jun 22, 2007 5:02 pm
Only one more thread after this one...

magic*esi



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Joined: Tue Jun 05, 2007 7:02 pm
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Fri Jun 22, 2007 5:03 pm
I'm sorry that I won't keep everything in one post, but I remember what it's like when no one replies to your thing. It's not fun. How long has this been up? It's really good. I know more people will read it if it's a 'hot thread', so now it is! Hope you don't mind all the posts!

magic*esi



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Joined: Sun Jun 03, 2007 1:31 pm
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Sun Jun 24, 2007 2:47 pm
That is very good write moe i know i would like to read it.



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Joined: Tue Dec 27, 2005 9:14 pm
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Sun Jun 24, 2007 8:25 pm
magic*esi,

This is a very clever tactic, but I'd like to go on record not encouraging it. This makes a lot more work for the moderator and not very much useful information is yielded. Eventually, there might be some, but if more people start using this clever tactic, it is going to take much longer for your posts to be approved. Beware!

Write It Mod



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r

Joined: Sat Jun 02, 2007 11:14 am
Posts: 45
Sun Jun 24, 2007 8:50 pm
I'll post more later, but I'm almost never on the computer. It may seem confusing because this is the last book in the series. I'm writing it backward's by the way.



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r

Joined: Sat Jun 02, 2007 11:14 am
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Sun Jun 24, 2007 8:53 pm
It will start on the first day of the battle, which is December 1st 2079- and continue to the last December 25th 2079.



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Joined: Tue Jun 26, 2007 1:12 pm
Posts: 590
Thu Jul 05, 2007 2:11 pm
More. MORE,MORE,MORE,MORE,MORE,MORE,MORE,MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:) please do more! MORE STORIES,and that was only a polouge! please posr more

_Xepher_
soon to be a great writer



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Joined: Mon Jun 11, 2007 12:51 pm
Posts: 7835
Sat Jul 14, 2007 3:52 pm
That's kind of you, Magic Esi. A little annoying, but... OK. And I didn't look because it was a huge thread, I'm just checking them all out. So. I agree with you, though, it is awesome. Keep going!



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Joined: Mon Jul 23, 2007 5:25 pm
Posts: 354
Mon Jul 23, 2007 6:00 pm
Wow, that sounds like a great story! Please post more. Its interesting that you say you are writing the series backwards.  Why are you doing that? I'm trying to learn different styles of writing, but so far, yours is the most interesting (writing backwards).
 

 
Oh and for all of you with long stories stored on your computer, open the scholastic site, then open your story. Hightlight the part of the story u want to post on the message board then right-click and then click "copy".  In the "new message" page on the boards, right-click again and then click "paste".  The part of the story that you hightlighted from your document page should appear in the message body.  That saves a lot of time and there are fewer mistakes.
Just thought you all would like to know that.
 
Storm-Runner
(By the way, some of you will know me from the novel boards as Harpdreams or Music_is_my_life. I won't be on either of these accounts very much because my internet won't let me, but hopefully I'll see you around under this name! )



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r

Joined: Sat Jun 02, 2007 11:14 am
Posts: 45
Sun Aug 05, 2007 5:54 pm
I'm writing backwards because I just wanted to try something new. Going from the last book  then writing my way to the first. It's kinda fun because your mentioning stuff that happened previously, and even the Author doesn't know all the history of the characters.



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Joined: Sun Apr 01, 2007 1:00 pm
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Fri Aug 10, 2007 1:25 pm
It sounds like it could be interesting.
 
When you write, can you use a few more commas?  Some of your sentences are long, and using commas could break them down a bit and make them easier to read.



 Re: A excerpt from my new sory.r
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Joined: Sun Oct 24, 2010 7:38 pm
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Wed Nov 24, 2010 1:53 pm
CAN i friend you???????????????????????????  i love the story, and I also like the percy jackson series!!!!!!!!!!



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