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 Abusive technology use

Joined: Fri Feb 19, 2016 2:32 pm
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Fri Feb 19, 2016 2:33 pm

Abusive use of electronics is a very common thing in the USA today. It is something that has only started in the 2000’s and I don’t think that we are very proud of it. It has become so big in the past few years. It never slowed down just kept going up and up until now where it is really bad. Technology such as video games, cellular phones, computers, tv’s, and game consoles are used way too much and people are starting to become addicted, this is bad because It takes up time, it Causes diseases and issues, and you lack in some need to know skills.

There are two main groups that i think of, they are mental and physical health. There are some conditions that you could come up with such as, Carpal Tunnel which a syndrome. You get a tingly feeling in your hands down to your wrists. It is caused by a pinched nerve in your wrist. Other conditions you could get would be dry eyes, strained vision. It also affects your sleep and if you gain or lose weight. On an average people lose 10-30 pounds off of their original weight. As you can see electronic addiction is something that causes bad conditions that you don’t want to deal with.

Time is something very important that you should not take advantage of. I agree with this statement because you do not have all the time in the world and it should be cherished. Technology takes up so much of our time. the average adult is actually awake for 15 hours and 45 minutes out of all that time 45% of it is spent on something electronic. that time could be spent doing homework or studying. Even just spending time with your family or friends. But either way your time could be spent doing something more progressive.

Some of the skills you need for everyday life and just some you need in general are being taken away or not practiced. You have trouble with you coping skills. Which is just talking to friends or family. You can talk about your feelings, love-life, or just something you are passionate about. Other life skills you need to have or should learn are studying, how to write in cursive which is one that a lot of people forget because they text so much. You also need to know how to use your brain… Thinking with street smart and school smart. So as you can see electronics hurt and break down skills that everybody should have and use.

Our environment is also something to work on and fix when we are think about technology. With all these factories the rise in carbon dioxide has come to  0.04% which does not look like much but that is 400 parts per million. 500 years ago it was as low as 180 parts per million which is incredible.  We are now known as the industrial revolution because we have so many factories and objects that put CO2 in the air. So CO2 is something we need to cherish, if we don’t the plants will not be able to live and therefore we will die too.

Money is something we need to start worrying about too. All of the new technology such as an apple iphone can cost up to $800. That is way too much when people could be spending that money on food for their family or even the rent. A Macbook Pro by Apple is almost as expensive as paying your rent for one month. Why can’t you be spending that money on something that it is needed for most.

Technology has many effects on our everydY life In fact it has affected the whole world in the last 15 years. We are starting to become weaker in everyday school skills and gaining intelligence on how to turn on a phone or TV. People can also get conditions or diseases that can affect their everyday life. A lot of people are abusing their use of technology today and It also takes up money and time. Abusive use on the internet takes up too much time.

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