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 Aliens and Allies: part 1 (please read.)
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Joined: Thu Apr 29, 2010 10:59 am
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Tue Jan 31, 2012 7:24 pm

Aliens and Allies: Part 1
My heart raced. The Checo's were on our spaceship. They were blue-green, lizard like creature. They had long tails. I shivered as I thought about what they had done to Jake. My cousin had been attacked by one. I shook off the thought as I continued walking down the Checo's ship. I spotted one and tried to hide. I was too late. I felt a sharp pain as the (...) hit my side. Everything went black.
 I could feel the cold, hard ground underneath me. I slowly opened my eyes. I was in what looked like a normal jail cell. It was a normal jail cell! I raced towards the front of the cell and started banging on the bars.
"Shhh! Be quiet!" I turned to see a huge guard. I shrunk back. Several hours later, I felt a hand grasp my sholder. "Time to see the king." the guard said firmly. I shrugged and got up. My king would rescue me. Not their king. My king, my father, would free me. He's always hated the Checo's anyways.  I almost tripped as I got pushed into the throne room.
"Ha, ha, ha!" A Checo, smaller than the guard, but still big, sat on a bejewled throne. He had a crown on his head and a silver cane.
"Hello, Jaca." I whispered. I had seen him agrue with my father.
"Has your father no-one left to fight, but his own daughter?!" Jaca let out another laugh.
"He has plenty of soldeirs!" I yelled.
"Ah, I'm sure of that." He glanced at the queen. "What should we do with her? Ransom her? Keep her in the prison? Exacute?" At the last thing he had suggested, I thurst back hard onto the guard. He tumbled back. My hands were tied, but not my feet. I started to run. The guard was still lying on the ground. Right when I got near the door, another guard stopped me.
"Send her to the prison! I'm sure that the king will give something for his beloved daughter!" I looked up at Jaca. He had others around him. The queen, an offical, several guards...all were glaring at me. Then I spotted some one else. A boy that looked about my age. His huge eyes weren't glaring, but seemed to have sympathy. Who was he? Probally a servant. I flipped my head around to start walking back to the prison.
                                                  End of Part 1

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 Re: Aliens and Allies: part 1 (please read.)
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Joined: Mon Feb 27, 2012 6:35 pm
Posts: 9
Fri Mar 02, 2012 12:03 am

i love it !!!!!!!!    it is about aliens !!!  my favorite!smiley




 Re: Aliens and Allies: part 1 (please read.)
frequent_vsitor

Joined: Thu Apr 29, 2010 10:59 am
Posts: 593
Sun Mar 11, 2012 11:36 pm

Thanks!
Sadly, I'm very busy, so I don't know if I'll continue this one....




 Re: Aliens and Allies: part 1 (please read.)
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Joined: Sat Jun 16, 2007 5:17 pm
Posts: 7691
Sat Apr 28, 2012 10:01 pm
very interesting, I like it



 Re: Aliens and Allies: part 1 (please read.)
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Joined: Sun Apr 15, 2012 11:52 am
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Fri May 04, 2012 10:22 pm
this...is...awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! owen



 Re: Aliens and Allies: part 1 (please read.)
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Joined: Tue Feb 21, 2012 1:41 am
Posts: 10
Wed Jun 06, 2012 3:36 pm
ME LIKEY!!!!!!!!! i give it a 15 1/2!!! Awesome work, BTW



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