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 Areana Fights Eval
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Joined: Mon May 16, 2016 8:44 pm
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Mon May 16, 2016 9:31 pm

Hey guys colment down below and say if you mant more. Anyway here is the first chapter of a story I wrote Areana Fights Eval

Chapter 1 Areana Stikes Again
Areana felt proud to be a hero.
 She had beat Billy in a game of Monapolly.
 When he loses, it makes him quit somthing. Areana could of been in danger because she had used her fairy powers to help her win. Noboady knew about Areana being a fairy exept for her family.
 




 Re: Areana Fights Eval
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Joined: Wed May 11, 2016 8:01 pm
Posts: 270
Thu Jun 02, 2016 6:47 pm

You could lengthen it a bit so "Areana felt proud to be a hero" Would be something like, "Arena felt proud to be a hero. The city was probably proud of their unknown guardian, too." But I like the storyline. Keep up the good work!

-Dragoncrown 485




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