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Your day?
Great, I won a blue ribbon in... 24%  24%  [ 4 ]
Good! 53%  53%  [ 9 ]
Great!*snort* 12%  12%  [ 2 ]
Crummy, bad , choose your word 12%  12%  [ 2 ]
Total votes : 17
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 Bad Day; a poem
visitor

Joined: Thu Dec 31, 2009 4:39 pm
Posts: 87
Mon Apr 23, 2012 10:07 pm
Bad Day: In the deep pit of despair, No life isn't fair, And it is only forth class, I'm giving stupid answers in mass, I've already been hit in the face with a dodge ball, I trip over my feet and fall, What a bad day this has been! I bombed my math test, This is a mediocre day at best! And to top it all off, my yogurt explodes! The popular girls are looking at me as if I'm a toad, What a terrible day it's been!



 Re: Bad Day; a poem

Joined: Sun Nov 20, 2011 5:57 pm
Posts: 110
Fri Aug 17, 2012 10:06 am
Hey! Let me help you fix your day! Wake up early so your fresh. Practice and don't mind being hit by a dodge ball. Take it as a compliment. People pick on you because you are "unbeatable". Study for your math tests man. And when your yogurt explodes, laugh at it or take this as a chance to make a food fight. Hope this helps!



 Re: Bad Day; a poem

Joined: Sun Nov 20, 2011 5:57 pm
Posts: 110
Fri Nov 15, 2013 10:35 pm
oh........................................ hi



 Re: Bad Day; a poem
new

Joined: Tue May 20, 2014 4:26 pm
Posts: 19
Sun May 25, 2014 1:33 pm
My day is good



 Re: Bad Day; a poem
new

Joined: Sat Jan 02, 2016 2:22 am
Posts: 26
Sat Jan 02, 2016 3:01 am

I KNOW A BAD DAY WHEN I SEE IT OR FEEL IT. THIS GIRL AT MY SCHOOL HER WELL SHE CALLS IT YURGURT ANYWAY HER YURGURT EXPLODED ON HER IN FRONT OF THE "COOL" KIDS AND SHE WAS CRYING I FELT BAD FOR HER. WHEN OTHER PEOPLE CRY IT MAKES ME CRY BECAUSEE I DONT WANT ANYONE TO EVER BE SAD. UNLESS ITS TEARS OF JOY




 Re: Bad Day; a poem
new

Joined: Sun Feb 28, 2016 3:59 am
Posts: 2
Sun Feb 28, 2016 4:00 am

Howare you doing tody guys?! Sominmes you have good day? And sometimes you have ad days ?




 Re: Bad Day; a poem
new

Joined: Wed May 11, 2016 8:01 pm
Posts: 269
Wed May 25, 2016 4:26 pm

So...here's my poem. I liked yours, too.

I woke up in the morning with the sun shining in my face.

I just remembered something that snapped me out of my embrace.

Today is no school! Today is Summer Break!

Today will be great!

And that's been my day.

Well...so far, that is.




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