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 Chronicles of the Ice ~Book 1, Prologue~

Joined: Mon Jun 13, 2011 1:10 pm
Posts: 59
Fri Mar 30, 2012 6:50 pm

Note - I am British, so instead of sled, I say sledge. Sorry about that and all. 

 

The young girl lay on the ice. She was wet, cold and terrified. Numbness had crept into her limbs and they refused to move. Her cold, burning skin stuck to the ice. She squeezed her eyes close and gritted her teeth. Deafening silence roared like a football crowd in her head, making it impossible it concentrate. She sighed, and gave up, relaxing her body. There was no hope now, no point in trying. It was midnight when it happened. She had been trekking across the ice to her camp, when a dark, tall, lone sledge driver had sped towards her. The metal blades of his sledge, slicing towards her at dangerous speeds. The dogs, loping towards her as fast as a bullet, flecks of spit flying out of their mouths, snow spraying up into the air where their powerful paws hit the ice. The sled driver, so calm, not even trying to avoid hitting her. The impact. It felt like she was being electrocuted, slashed, whipped and slapped at the same time. Then silence. Nothing. Just black.




 Re: Chronicles of the Ice ~Book 1, Prologue~

Joined: Sat Nov 12, 2011 3:11 pm
Posts: 505
Sat Apr 21, 2012 12:38 am

Wow  that was intesting! Nice start off! Hope you write more

Me smiley happy




 Re: Chronicles of the Ice ~Book 1, Prologue~
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Joined: Sat Jun 16, 2007 5:17 pm
Posts: 7691
Wed May 23, 2012 1:17 am
very interesting. I like it.



 Re: Chronicles of the Ice ~Book 1, Prologue~
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Joined: Thu Apr 19, 2012 2:42 pm
Posts: 22
Sun Jun 10, 2012 7:42 pm
That book is off to a great start. i sugest to maby describe the sled and it's rider more and enclude the girl's name somewhere in chapter 1. remember these are just sugestions you don't have to use them if you don't want to.



 Re: Chronicles of the Ice ~Book 1, Prologue~
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Joined: Mon Dec 10, 2012 11:04 pm
Posts: 2
Tue Dec 11, 2012 2:08 am
It's great! I think you should add some more details, but that's it. Please write more



 Re: Chronicles of the Ice ~Book 1, Prologue~
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Joined: Wed Nov 28, 2012 2:33 am
Posts: 37
Wed Dec 12, 2012 1:49 am
really awesome plz write more



 Re: Chronicles of the Ice ~Book 1, Prologue~
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Joined: Sun Sep 02, 2012 6:28 pm
Posts: 21
Thu Dec 13, 2012 1:26 pm
I liked it! Keep in mind that there are titles, "Chronicles of the Iceman", and ''Chronicles of the Icemark".



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