Thanks for your submission omg!!! Sorry it took so long!
I’m now going to review your profile and test your character mwahahaha >) I only commented on the sections where I had something to say/correct, everything else is Fine. Pls don't be scared away by all the notes, I'm not trying to be scary, just helpful :O
Characters’ Full Name: Avia Bee Fillip
Age (12-19): 14
Camp: Camp Half-Blood
Godly Parent/Heritage: Hecate
Physical Appearance: (Her appearance at the moment- you'll see why this matters) Long bleached blonde hair- her original color is a dark brown, which peeks through at her roots- She's also really good at dying her hair, so it will change, sleepy hazel eyes (muddy brown and little flakes of grey-green), long face, olive skin, lanky and tall but very structured build, button nose. (You said details, sooooo.....) Good! That’s exactly the kind of details/description I was aiming to receive, great!
Clothing Style: It mostly varies on her moods, as she changes her style(and hair color) every few months, Her outfits are very flowery but also very edgy, she likes wearing big belts and boots. And sometimes she wears rainboots on sunny days but no one really knows why. (It's so when rain comes all the happy sunshine moments keep the rain out a bit more- old family tradition(mortal side)
Personality: Restless, adventurous, head strong, quiet but in a confident way, friendly, has a go with it feel but will take action (often to the extreme) when she deems necessary(all the time), spunky, match-maker (When did this develop? How does this show up? Is it negative or positive? Does it help her make friends, or does it drive people away? It seems a bit out-of-place with the rest of her personality, and doesn’t fit in with the rest of her bio), has a peaceful, philosophical side, mischevious and a little bit of a prankster, trusting, but very shrewd and witty.Loves nature, plants and animals, very independent. Avia is obviously a very interesting character, and you have done a great job with her personality up to now. However, she still needs a bit further fleshing-out. There are not enough flaws/serious flaws here to outweigh the positives. What’s the deal here? Which is supposed to be her greatest flaw- her recklessness? Her stubbornness? None of them are explicitly addressed as flaws. More notes on that further down:
Fatal Flaw: Her head-strong-y-ness(forgive me) and need for action and reckless nature often makes her dive head first into situations that require thinking, then action. Also, her trusting of others could also prove fatal. So should I write it down as recklessness? That could be a perfectly legit fatal flaw, no probs with that- however, I need more dets on her trusting. Is it based on naiveté? Does she insist on thinking the best of others and blindly trusting them? This is fine, but for a character as independent as her, I don’t see how it could really prove fatal- like, sure, it could get her into trouble, but wouldn’t a more independent person manage to get out of it, as she wouldn’t rely on those people she trusts?
Likes: Likes rock music and alternative, sci-fi movies, blue, nature, animals(I couldn't really pick one, but she hates squirrels...), spaghetti and meatballs
Dislikes: Staying the same for to long, the quiet, being alone, silence, failure, losing people, SQUIRRELS(She'll kill them all, one day...), ice cream noo save the squirrels, ahaha, this is good
Pet Peeves: When people talk excessively and obnoxiously loudly9so many adverbs), when people interrupt her thought processing.
Mortal Family: Her dad, Frank, and her little sister, Janie, and her step-mom Hannah.
Friends: Basically anyone she feels she can get along with.
Boyfriend/Girlfriend: Ehhhhhhh she's to independent now but maybe one day.
Crush: Many petty crushes just to occupy her time. Most celebreties or fictional, so not worth mentioning.
Enemy?: She makes them very easily, but none so far. Why? Is it because of her restlessness, or stubbornness? Elaborate. You described her as a friendly person- and she obviously seems willing to hang out with people. So what is it that keeps her from making friends and grants her enemies so easily? When did this start building up in her childhood? How has it affected her personality?
Best and Worst Subject at School: Best: Science. Worst: History.
Best and Worst Subject at Camp: Best: Pegasus Riding. Worst: Ancient Greek.
Weapon of Choice: Double daggers
Mist Version: (I'm not entirely sure what this meant, so I'll fill it out later I guess) That’s alright. By “mist” I’m referring to The Mist, you know, the invisible barrier between mortals and mythological things that keeps mortals from seeing them? So, Percy’s sword, Riptide, is a pen in its “Mist form”. Most weapons and magical objects of the campers have a Mist form, where they appear to be as everyday, mundane objects, but can transform into their true weapon form if need be (in Percy’s case, it’s through upcapping the pen, and it transforms into the sword- do you understand?).
Powers/Abilities: Can move things with her mind(I beleive it's called telekinesis???), but it's very limited based on the weight or size of the object, very good with potions and chemistry, knows a few charms, her powers are enhanced under moonlight, but only a slight difference, can see ghosts pretty well, has an understanding of animals and plants, almost comunicating but not really, the animals don't fear her is what I'm saying. Very, very good job! She has understandable powers, without being overpowered! It’s a great foundation of her abilities- which will inevitably evolve and improve as the RP goes on.
Strengths:The moonlight, being in the outdoors.
Weaknesses: Confined, dusty spaces, the dawn(her powers weaken the most after the moonlight is over) Hm, although both strengths and weaknesses are great, I was thinking of more: like, not just limited to the strengths and weaknesses of their abilities, but generally: does she have a great stamina? Is she a slow runner? Is she bad at defense? Does she have great stealth skills? Things like that, that could determine their position in a fight, survival etc. It’s my bad, perhaps, for not clarifying. In case you go back to redo those sections as well, keep in mind that they should also make sense based on her demigod abilities, personality, and backstory.
Background: When she was a kid her dad and herself traveled all the time and never settled down for more than a few months. Her dad is very nice, quiet, and very supportive of her. Her dad had a big company job that required a lot of travel. When she was 12, they moved again which was where they met Hannah, who was working at a library near their house. Hannah is very sweet, very empowering and stubborn person, and she's a bit reckless. Avia really actually likes her step-mom a lot, which is probably where she gets her more reckless side. So Frank and Hannah got married, and the three of them settled down in a small town. When Janie was born it was a very happy time for everyone. Janie is two now(she has red hair). Avia loves Janie and takes her everywhere. A couple months before being sent to Camp Half-Blood, Avia, Janie, Hannah, and Frank were at home. Hannah was holding Janie when she passed out and dropped Janie. Hannah caught her by levitating her up from the ground before she hit it, which was when her dad decided to send her to camp. Hannah was ok, but she had had a minor stroke and would be off work for a while. This is a very good bio! It’s acceptable, but here are a few more things that would be nice if you elaborated on:
->Her personality, and fatal flaw, developing according to her step-mother’s, whom she met when she was 12, sounds a bit unlikely, since she was already old enough by then to already have developed her personality. So maybe Hannah’s influence on Avia encouraged or sharpened those traits, but they were most likely already there: so, how did they first develop?
-> Additionally, what was her socialization (?) as a kid? How did she get along at school, or was she homeschooled? Did she make friends, or enemies, a lot? Did she often get in trouble? Was she feeling lonely? Answering these questions in the background section will further explain her personality now- also, she loves to change and hates to stay the same, so how did this come up? Moving around a lot? Is she scared she won’t like who she really is? If so, how did this insecurity develop- etc.
->Also, most demigods usually have ADHD and dyslexia, often get into trouble, and some have monsters coming after them. Did she experience any of the sort?
->Upon arriving at Camp, what was her life there? How did she adjust? How does she feel about her mother, Hecate?
Questions/Requests/Other: I'm a bit confused about the mist part. Also, how many people do we need to start, and when this rp ends, do you care if I use this character again? Thanks. I hope I explained the Mist, but if you’re still confused you can look it up in the books or some other Rick Riordan source (or ask me to explain again, hah). We need at least 3 people to start, and it’d be better if they were characters from both Camps- although there isn’t a deadline for submissions, so other people can join after the RP has started. And yes, you can use this character again even while the RP is still going, as long as you can keep up, it doesn’t matter. And of course you can use her again after the RP ends.
Also note that, even though I would highly appreciate if you revisited the sections of the profile where I made notes on improvement, most of those notes are just prompts and food for thought; you’re not inclined to redo things according to them.
All in all, Avia is a very interesting character, and I’m looking forward to seeing her in the RP! She needs some polishing here and there, but she’s a great character and very welcome in the RP!