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 do you like my story so far?

Joined: Mon Dec 28, 2015 11:01 pm
Posts: 13
Tue Dec 29, 2015 9:46 pm

He had thin brown hair, rosy cheeks. His hand were always grabbing, his legs were always kicking. His brilliant blue eyes captured the attention of her the most though. They were like tainted blue dimonds. "Oh Joseph, my baby boy" she cooed, but her voice was sad. Isabel knew she couldn't keep him for long. The evil king Casiniah ordered to have all first-born sons wiped out. King Casiniah was corrupted, he didn't know what to do with himself. His wife had burned herself due to a contageous brain disease, which had infected her sons as well. Leaving the last name of Gorson to the dust. He was angry, but he didn't know what to do about it. Isabel was worried. She knew she couldn't stay in the same place for to long. She would be found, possibly caught, or worse... 

 Re: do you like my story so far?

Joined: Mon May 16, 2016 8:44 pm
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Mon May 16, 2016 9:03 pm

Yes I like your story so far. Please post more!

 Re: do you like my story so far?

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