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 Fate
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Joined: Sat Nov 14, 2015 6:08 pm
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Sat Nov 14, 2015 6:14 pm

Fleeing fruitlessly we try to break free from these heavy chains,

from the crushing weight of the destiny we never wanted and aren’t sure we can handle,

like Atlas holding up the heavens on his shoulders as punishment, unwillingly.

Words cut into us like knives with piercingly sharp edges, made of an unbreakable material,

slicing through our skins as though it was half-melted butter and drawing beads of crimson blood,

and we still dismiss them as irrelevant, unimportant, and attempting to forget them as they echo in our ears.

We can’t escape the inevitable, though, and we’ll still end up where we were supposed to.

The future is heading for us as though it’s a speeding train and we’re tied to the train tracks,

our screaming muffled by the gag, no one seeing us or how desperate we are to be saved.

We’re bound together with strings of fate that feel like invisible, unbreakable, shackles.

The one thing that was predestined that we won’t ever try to fight, that even we’ll fight for,

and we savor every moment we have together because it’s also fated that we’re torn apart.

The past is catching up to us in this race with such painfully, terribly, high-stakes.

And no matter the amount of effort poured into escaping it’s cruel, relentless reach,there are some things you can’t outrun and the past, glorious and atrocious, is one of them.




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Joined: Sat Dec 12, 2015 1:21 am
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Sun Mar 20, 2016 3:20 am

This is awesome. Hey could I use this in a book that I'm writing. I'll self-publish the book and give you credit for the poem




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