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 Forever and For Always (my movie) Opening sequence
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Joined: Mon Mar 01, 2010 10:53 pm
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Sat Jun 26, 2010 8:49 pm

Tom (over voice): Yeah, I guess it was my fault well not completely! I messed my life up: Big Time! I better low down a bit. Hi I'm Tom, Tom Avery. One night, that's all it takes to change your life. Take it from me and my friends. I'm 14, we all are. And to be honest all of our life’s completely stink! So we had a bright idea to steal a car from John's brothers repair shop, and drive it to freedom! That worked amazing. It all started like this...

 

(Tom hears tapping on his bed room window to finds John throwing tiny pebbles at it)

John: Hurry up tom! Gosh you're slow!

Tom: Coming! (Finishes packing stuff into a brown suitcase)

 

(Tom runs across the street to join John who then catch the bus and arrive at a car repair shop called: Billing's Auto)

Adam: Finally decided to show up did we!?

Clancy: Calm down he's here now! How ya doing Tom?

Tom: Same as always (Tom glances nervously from the red SUV to his friends)

Adam: Let's get this show on the road shall we??? Tom can you hotwire this baby?

Tom: I have no clue how!

Adam: Then I'll talk you through it! Just get under the car!

Tom: Fine Adam! No need to get so worked up! (Gets under the car) What do I do now?

Adam: Red to green, then green to blue!

Tom: Slow down Adam! We aren't all geniuses!

Adam (through clenched teeth): Red to green, green to blue!

(Engine starts)

Tom: Got it!

 

(All four boys climb into the car. John behind the wheel, Clancy beside him with a map and Tom and Adam in the back. The car pulls out of the lot)

John: *Laughs* Whoo Hoo!! This is the life ain't it! No more brothers!

Adam: No more stupid orphanage!

Tom: No more evil Aunt Beatrice!

Clancy: Maybe now my mom will have extra money!

 

(Sign show now leaving Vancouver~ then a montage of them driving~ now entering Burnaby~ in a residential area)

(It's dark out and suddenly a woman in black jogs out in front of them)

John: Oh no! (Tries to avoid her, with no luck)

Adam: Oh my god! You just hit a woman!

John (stepping out of the car): Don't panic, she's probably dead!

 

*After they are all out of the car*

Clancy (feels the woman's pulse): She’s alive; barley. What do we do?!

Adam: Don't panic!

John: Drive away!

Tom: No, we better, um, call her an ambulance!

John: No, then they'll find us for sure!

Adam: Who?

John: The cops, stupid!

Clancy (on the verge of tears): Guys, I'm scared!

John (Yelling): WE ALL ARE! SHUT UP CLANCY, YOU IDIOT!

Clancy: *starts softly sobbing, trying to hide it*

Tom: Um, guys! GUYS! Do you hear that?!

(The four boys turn and hear sirens)

Adam: Sirens...

John: Darn it; the fuzz!

Clancy: What do we do?!

Adam: Firstly, don't panic, secondly... RUN!

John: Too late they've seen us! Pretend we are innocent okay! I'll do all the talking leave it to me!

 

(Male and Female police officers step out of the cop car)

Male officer: What's going on here (notices woman on the ground) Did you boys-

John (trying to look all innocent): No sir! We came out of the house when we heard her being hit. Whoever did it bailed right here.

Female officer: Which is your house?

John: Um... (Looks at the other three boys)

Adam: It's my house they were sleeping over. It's over there.

Male officer: Let me speak to your parents

Adam: Not home...

Female officer: Cell phone number?

Adam: Don't have one!

Clancy (sadly): Mine do! Guys it's over!

(Police call Clancy's mother)

Female officer: Boys you’re under arrest come with us!

 Male officer: You have the right to remain silent.

(Handcuffs and escorts the group into the police car)

John: *Gives Clancy a dirty look*

 

Tom (over voice): So that's how it all started. We were all sentenced to four years in a juvenile detention center off the coast of Vancouver Island with charges for theft, underage/reckless driving, resisting arrest, lying to authorities. The woman's alive though she's in a coma! If she dies we'll be convicted for a longer sentence but... well for now, I guess the four of us just have to make life work! At least we have each other!

 

(Opening credits)

Message Edited by Write_It_Moderator on 06-29-2010 04:49 PM




 Re: Forever and For Always (my movie) Opening sequence

Joined: Sun Sep 26, 2010 6:57 pm
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Sun Sep 26, 2010 7:07 pm
a great script, but if it's a movie, it should have directions(INT, EXT, CUT TO, FADE IN, FADE OUT, CLOSE UP, ETC.)



 Re: Forever and For Always (my movie) Opening sequence
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Joined: Sun Oct 25, 2009 9:09 am
Posts: 974
Sun Oct 24, 2010 9:19 am
it's pretty good!!! I think that you could add more details, or something like that, because it seems vague and fast-moving. Thats all I can think of! Are you going to keep posting??



 Re: Forever and For Always (my movie) Opening sequence
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Joined: Mon Mar 01, 2010 10:53 pm
Posts: 1084
Fri Nov 05, 2010 9:13 pm


_monabellarocker_ wrote:
it's pretty good!!! I think that you could add more details, or something like that, because it seems vague and fast-moving. Thats all I can think of! Are you going to keep posting??



This is just a rough draft so, yeah but thanks for your comment also. I may post more of it but I don't seem to be getting enough response. Do you like it so far?!



 Re: Forever and For Always (my movie) Opening sequence

Joined: Fri Dec 10, 2010 11:50 am
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Thu Feb 02, 2012 7:49 pm
I liked it. But I think that is should me a little longer. Well I hope you keep posting. Peace out peep, Kenzie. :) <3



 Re: Forever and For Always (my movie) Opening sequence
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Joined: Sun Jun 03, 2012 4:59 pm
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Wed Jun 06, 2012 8:47 pm
This is an amazing script! I can't wait to read more!!!! I'm so excited to see if the woman dies or not! I hope there is a twist like..... It is Tom's Aunt Beatrice!!!



 Re: Forever and For Always (my movie) Opening sequence
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Joined: Sun Oct 21, 2012 8:14 pm
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Mon Nov 26, 2012 8:22 pm
Great! I love how the whole thing just jumped into action! Keep it up! :D



 Re: Forever and For Always (my movie) Opening sequence
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Joined: Fri Dec 21, 2012 12:26 am
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Sat Jan 26, 2013 11:36 pm
Well, i read the first few parts an i have to say it was pretty good. Here's the thing. When Tom does the overvoice, don't have Tom say anything about the car. i think it's pretty good and i want to hear more from you.



 Re: Forever and For Always (my movie) Opening sequence
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Joined: Mon Mar 25, 2013 1:44 pm
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Mon Mar 25, 2013 8:53 pm
It seemed like you put the whole story in that one part. What are you going to do next?



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Tue Dec 03, 2013 5:07 am
wow! Cool!! It's like in reality. Keep posting Kenzie :)



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