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 Goodbye
visitor

Joined: Fri Mar 06, 2009 2:31 pm
Posts: 71
Sat Dec 12, 2009 9:20 pm
"Goodbye"  --By: Blue
 
Caged inside as crowds walk by
Day and night I wonder why
I am who I am, but who am I
But a man who sheds no tears to cry
My purpose gone, but I must try
To make things right before I die
Live a life that's not a lie
No more choking  alibi
A day will come when I must fly
So tell the world I said goodbye



 Re: Goodbye
contributor

Joined: Sun Sep 14, 2008 5:37 pm
Posts: 818
Tue Jan 05, 2010 5:46 pm
At first I thought that you were leaving the boards!  I've never seen you before and I've never been on this board before, but I don't like it when someone leaves a board just because nobody is looking at what they write or something.



 Re: Goodbye
visitor

Joined: Fri Mar 06, 2009 2:31 pm
Posts: 71
Mon Jan 11, 2010 9:31 pm
You kidding? Not leaving, I love to share what I write too much. lol. Whether people look at it or not, I still like getting some of the things in my head out and in the open.



 Re: Goodbye
contributor

Joined: Tue Oct 06, 2009 6:52 pm
Posts: 1171
Tue Feb 09, 2010 9:12 pm
Aaaah! You scared me! I thought you were leaving or something!

~treehugger17 :)



 Re: Goodbye
frequent_contributor

Joined: Fri Feb 02, 2007 11:47 am
Posts: 7216
Thu Feb 25, 2010 8:03 pm
Oh my gosh! I freaked out for a moment there because I thought you were leaving us! *HUGE breath of relief!*
 
Awesome lyrics, once again! Have you ever considered posting on the Poetry: Post Work board? You might be able to get more comments on there. :)
 
 
 
~Diana
 
"Today is everything."



 Re: Goodbye
frequent_vsitor

Joined: Tue Mar 02, 2010 6:45 pm
Posts: 277
Mon Jan 24, 2011 2:06 pm
Ha, ha, ha. :robottongue: I thought you were leaving.

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 Re: Goodbye
frequent_vsitor

Joined: Tue Mar 02, 2010 6:45 pm
Posts: 277
Mon Jan 24, 2011 2:10 pm
Oh! I forgot to comment. :robothappy: I like the rhyming at the end of every line. :robotwink: Keep writing.

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 Re: Goodbye
regular_visitor

Joined: Wed Jan 26, 2011 5:36 pm
Posts: 128
Thu Sep 01, 2011 4:28 pm
really good. keep writing.



 Re: Goodbye
visitor

Joined: Sun Jul 10, 2011 6:08 pm
Posts: 165
Sat Mar 03, 2012 1:55 am

Awesome. :D I write songs too, here and there. Check me out. xD

 

~IsisLovesCupcakes(;~




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