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Is This Good?
a.needs something 67%  67%  [ 8 ]
b.no! 25%  25%  [ 3 ]
c.perfect! 8%  8%  [ 1 ]
Total votes : 12
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 Hello! I'm New!
new

Joined: Tue Apr 17, 2012 5:57 pm
Posts: 6
Mon Jun 25, 2012 11:53 pm
Jessica: Look at that girl, she's new. Monica: Duh. Like we didn't know! Katy: Hi, I'm new! They all stare at each other.



 Re: Hello! I'm New!
new

Joined: Fri Oct 05, 2012 7:08 pm
Posts: 22
Tue Oct 09, 2012 12:04 am
Hi,I was reading this and it was short , not much detail.I think if u were writing a book this would be a good start



 Re: Hello! I'm New!
new

Joined: Mon Mar 25, 2013 1:44 pm
Posts: 82
Mon Mar 25, 2013 9:01 pm
This is just advice, but I think that you should do it more like this: Jessica:Look at that girl, she must be another new student. Monica: Duh! Like we didn't already figure that out for ourselves! Katy: Hi! (Hesitates visibly) I'm new here, and I can't find my classroom. Do you know where this is? (Shows them a yellow paper with her schedule layed out on it) I think that the classroom part might make them saying she's new/I'm new a bit less repetitive.



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