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 Horse Brains

Joined: Tue Mar 17, 2015 10:48 pm
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Tue Mar 24, 2015 5:23 pm

Horse Brains


        I am a Shetland pony named Sliver. My sister's name is Moonlight. We used to be free. I would run along beside her playfully nip her ear. That changed. One hazy morning we fell asleep by the brooke. While we were sleeping white men tied rope around our necks and pulled us to a horse trailer. I woke up and nudged my sister. My sister awoke and neighed.

         "Where are we?" she neighed.

       "I don't know." I answered.

       The only thing I knew was  that we weren't by the brooke. I looked around. There wasn't any crisp apples or any hay. The old barn we slept in before was cozier than this. Well soon we would find out where we were.




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