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 How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Joined: Wed Nov 18, 2009 9:30 pm
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Sun Aug 29, 2010 12:28 am
Hey guys! I was thinking about this funny thing I saw called "How Twilight Should Have Ended" and I thought "Why not do one of these for Harry Potter?" and that's what I'm doing. I must warn you, I'm coming up with this on the spot, so it may not be very good.

*Harry and Voldie are having their big "Final Showdown"*
 
Harry: You can't love so you should die.
 
Voldie: What do you mean "can't love?" Have you forgotten about Bellatrix?
 
Harry: Yeah...Still don't know how that happened...
 
Voldie: But it did happen, so-
 
*Somebody in the audience shouts, "Get on with it!"*
 
Harry: Alright! Voldemort, you deserve to die because-
 
Voldie: Enough talk! Expelliarmus!
 
*A red light shoots out of Voldie's wand and knocks Harry's wand out of his hand*
 
Voldie: You're finally right where I want you. Avadakadavra!
 
*A green light flies towards Harry and-*
 
Me: Then J.K. Rowling has a heart attack and dies!
 
J.K: Hey! You can't do that to me!
 
Me: Why not? You did it to Dobby, Fred and Mad-Eye Moody.
 
J.K: I had to so the book would be emotional!
 
Me: That makes you a character killer, which is almost as bad as a smiley abuser!
 
J.K: Fine. Can I at least have a more emotional death?
 
Me: Sure. Then J.K. Rowling died from crying so hard because she killed Fred. Better?
 
J.K: No.

What? I was bored, okay?
 
"It's not a question of can or can't. There are some things in life you just do."
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 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Sun Sep 26, 2010 11:03 am
HaHa!
 

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 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Sun Oct 10, 2010 7:44 pm
Bwahahahahahhahahahaha!
 
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 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Joined: Sat Feb 13, 2010 2:04 pm
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Sun Oct 31, 2010 8:01 am
ROTFLOL!!!!!!!!!!



 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Joined: Mon Nov 01, 2010 12:47 am
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Mon Nov 08, 2010 5:06 pm
I noticed the Monty Python reference. :smileywink:
 
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-The Raven



 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Joined: Sun Mar 14, 2010 11:57 am
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Sun Nov 21, 2010 2:29 pm
I noticed it too. Lol!
 
"Get on with it!"
 
That was hilarious.



 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Joined: Fri Feb 02, 2007 11:47 am
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Wed Jan 19, 2011 8:04 pm
Haha, this is amazing!! :D DIE ROWLING DIEEEE!!!!!!!!

JK! ;)

(Haha, gettit? "JK," JK Rowling??)
(This is why I don't post on this board. :P )



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 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Joined: Sun Aug 09, 2009 1:20 pm
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Fri Feb 18, 2011 5:04 pm
Though I have not read HP, I do hate when authors just kill characters.



 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...

Joined: Mon May 16, 2011 4:27 pm
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Mon May 16, 2011 4:30 pm
harry potter is a really good they should keep making them their intresting. they mean alot to people. they should not stop wrinting. my whole family loves them. who doesnt though. their awesome. luv them
 
 
 
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 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Joined: Fri Dec 25, 2009 9:19 pm
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Fri May 20, 2011 6:30 pm
Ha ha I liked it!



 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Joined: Sat May 14, 2011 10:41 am
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Wed Jun 15, 2011 4:26 pm

I like you . my favorit animal is a cat . Whats yours?:smileytongue::smileywink:




 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Joined: Thu Apr 09, 2009 4:15 pm
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Fri Jun 17, 2011 8:31 pm
SO FUNNY NOW I KNOW FRED DIES. I THINK JK SHOULD DIE BCUZ SHE MADE FRED DIE! FRED WAS HOT! AND gaarasninja  SAYS DRACO MALFOY IS HOT! I LIKE CHEESE!



 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Fri Jun 17, 2011 8:33 pm
~90% of kids that see Hahnah Montana on a roof would call 911. If you're one of the 10% that would tell her to jump, post this to your signoff.



 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Joined: Thu Aug 19, 2010 6:33 am
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Tue Jun 28, 2011 8:20 am
Gosh, that was sooo funny!!! For something made-up on the spot it was hilariously awesome. Still, I think that letting all the most loved characters die was a good thing. It teaches you about life and how things can't always go the way you want...
 
Okay, who am I kidding?! I was freaking out when all those people died! It was ... it was just so ... *begins to cry* sad!!!
 
Sorry for the over-emotional bit. I like doing that sort of stuff. :) But still, J.K. Rowling shouldn't have let Fred, Dobby and Mad-Eye die. It was so cruel!

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 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Wed Aug 03, 2011 9:04 pm
Oh wow :smileyhappy:



 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Sat Feb 25, 2012 2:34 am

:O NUUUUUUUUUU!!!! (And yus, I meant to use U's instead of O's, it's my own world and I'll do whut I want!!! See? DID IT AGAIN!!!), NOT SMILEY KILLERS!!!!....




 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Tue Mar 20, 2012 3:47 am

i think harry potter should have not ended because it was a good seireis




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Sun Apr 01, 2012 4:34 pm

i found that preety funny ok very hahaha




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Sat Apr 07, 2012 3:26 am

smiley happy :3




 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Wed Apr 11, 2012 8:52 pm

i love harry potter it is the best movie ever i saw every series it is the best i am going wild of this movie> i am so a harry potter fan love it ahhhahhahah




 Re: How Harry Potter Should Have Ended...
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Sun Aug 19, 2012 11:45 am
ROFL



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Fri Oct 26, 2012 2:26 am
LOL!



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