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 I Asked God...

Joined: Wed Mar 01, 2006 8:39 pm
Posts: 4
Wed Mar 01, 2006 9:32 pm
I asked God for a flower, he gave me a bouquet,
I asked God for a minute, he gave me a day,
I asked God for true love, he gave me that to,
I asked God for an angel and he gave me you.



 Re: I Asked God...

Joined: Sat Mar 11, 2006 4:01 pm
Posts: 25
Sat Mar 11, 2006 4:03 pm
omg I totally love that poem. I'm a Christian too so it means a lot plus its just plain old sweet! I couldn't help saying "AWW!" it rox your an awesome poet!



 Re: I Asked God...

Joined: Thu Feb 09, 2006 8:58 pm
Posts: 14
Fri Mar 17, 2006 5:05 pm
I absolutely loved this poem! It flows so nicely, and it is so touching! I swear, it would be a perfect Valentines Day card!



 Re: I Asked God...
regular_visitor

Joined: Tue Feb 14, 2006 6:49 pm
Posts: 312
Tue Mar 28, 2006 2:48 pm
I love it! I'm a Christian also so it means something to me.



 Re: I Asked God...
visitor

Joined: Thu Mar 30, 2006 8:51 am
Posts: 80
Thu Mar 30, 2006 8:52 am
i love it but it's kinda short but totally sweet and pretty much true



 Re: I Asked God...

Joined: Fri Apr 07, 2006 4:44 pm
Posts: 11
Fri Apr 07, 2006 6:05 pm
omg! what a beautiful poem. it touches the soul...



 Re: I Asked God...

Joined: Mon Apr 24, 2006 8:14 pm
Posts: 1
Mon Apr 24, 2006 8:17 pm
WOW!I look up poetry and i am even a pretty good poet myself,but i have never read a poem that touched my heart quite like that one did. who-ever wrote this is an awesome poet and i love them cuz the poem is short and sweet and gets right to the point that they reallt do have a loved one.



 Re: I Asked God...

Joined: Fri May 05, 2006 6:51 pm
Posts: 9
Sun May 07, 2006 6:56 pm
hey this is such a bueatiful poem every time i read it all i can do is say aww so keep writing dont ever give up ur a great poet

ttyl
michgrl



 Re: I Asked God...
frequent_vsitor

Joined: Thu Mar 06, 2008 12:38 am
Posts: 318
Thu Mar 20, 2008 3:57 pm
Nice poem.
 
 
Coolblue is
Cooler than you!



 Re: I Asked God...
contributor

Joined: Mon Aug 24, 2009 5:14 pm
Posts: 279
Mon Apr 26, 2010 4:35 pm
Awesome soooooo pretty!



 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Sat May 01, 2010 9:06 pm
Posts: 32
Wed Aug 11, 2010 12:19 pm
great poem!



 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Sat Dec 12, 2015 1:21 am
Posts: 13
Sun Mar 20, 2016 11:43 pm

hey could i use this in a book




 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Sat Feb 27, 2016 3:10 pm
Posts: 68
Wed Apr 20, 2016 11:00 pm

OMG, best poem EVER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! smileywinkyesheartcoolcheekyangel




 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Wed May 18, 2016 1:42 am
Posts: 2
Wed May 18, 2016 1:45 am

What an encouraging piece!  




 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Thu May 12, 2016 2:05 pm
Posts: 52
Thu May 19, 2016 12:36 pm

That's sweet! angel




 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Sat May 21, 2016 12:13 am
Posts: 2
Sat May 21, 2016 12:39 am

<3




 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Thu May 12, 2016 8:18 pm
Posts: 6
Tue May 31, 2016 8:11 pm

That is so good! I think everybody can love that, Christian or not!




 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Tue Jun 21, 2016 8:24 pm
Posts: 1
Thu Aug 04, 2016 5:38 am

i like how youb connected with god becaue i love god myself he is my hero and my warrior




 Re: I Asked God...

Joined: Tue Mar 15, 2011 7:07 pm
Posts: 57
Sun Oct 09, 2016 3:53 pm

I asked god for a friend, he gave me a million

I asked god for peace, slowly it comes

I asked Allah for peace, and every night he gives it to me in dreams

I asked for how to make it happen, and in my dream, I was told to smile each and every day




 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Sun Feb 28, 2016 1:03 pm
Posts: 32
Mon Nov 07, 2016 12:24 am

   I love your poem and the way how you express God. Being a believer myself, I truely understand how God provides for us. Thank you for heartwarming poem.heartheartheartheart




 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Sun Nov 20, 2016 10:34 pm
Posts: 35
Sun Nov 20, 2016 10:44 pm

that was sooooooooooo cute!Icould not help myself.heart




 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Thu Nov 24, 2016 2:28 pm
Posts: 9
Sat Nov 26, 2016 10:21 pm

It's so good!I am a Christian,too!I love it!I like to think it is my job to notice things.I noticed that

the last word to each sentince rymed with the last word of the line after that line, if you know 

what I mean.heartyes 

      Good work!




 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Sun Nov 06, 2016 9:27 pm
Posts: 31
Sat Nov 26, 2016 11:24 pm

I'm christian too. This is great!




 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Sun Nov 20, 2016 10:34 pm
Posts: 35
Tue Nov 29, 2016 12:39 am

i asked god for love

he gave me that with peace

 




 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Tue Oct 11, 2016 3:00 pm
Posts: 1
Fri Dec 09, 2016 3:27 pm

Now this is what you call poetry...I love it so much and it is so deeply beautiful and trueheart




 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Sun Nov 20, 2016 10:34 pm
Posts: 35
Fri Jan 06, 2017 9:54 pm

God does provide for us with things. But he is not going to give us whatever we want.




 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Wed May 03, 2017 8:52 pm
Posts: 1
Tue May 09, 2017 9:55 pm

It's simple but beautiful. So thank you.




 Re: I Asked God...
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Joined: Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am
Posts: 4
Thu Jun 08, 2017 2:17 am

Oh my GOOOOOOSH!!!  Soooo cute!  I love it!!! yes




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