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 I Did It

Joined: Sat Feb 23, 2008 9:42 pm
Posts: 6584
Thu May 22, 2008 9:59 pm
This is setting in church. The 5th graders (I'm one of them) are planning the Sunday mass. I'm doing the First Reading. I was completley nervous.

    As Father (The Priest) is doing the Opening Prayer, my heart is thumping.
    'What if something goes wrong?' I thought. My classmate and I are doing the first and second reading. But I'm doing the 1st one. In front of the whole church (I'm not really used to doing stuff in front of crowds, unless it's a group of people).
    As we say, 'Amen', I couldn't help but panic.
    As we went up to the podium, my heart was still beating loudly.
    "A reading from the book of..." I started until, "The Word of the Lord".
    After then, I got some compliments of my reading. Maybe I'll be a lector or something...

H.Y.L.I.! (Hope you like it!)


 Re: I Did It

Joined: Fri Feb 02, 2007 11:47 am
Posts: 7216
Sat May 24, 2008 5:23 pm
It was nice... short and sweet!
About reading in front of your church, I know how you feel. I had to do that for confirmation class this year and I kept panicking. I like acting but I usually don't know most of the people in the audience. I felt that if I messed up, I'd be completely humiliated. When I finally did it, a bunch of people gave me compliments, and I ended up being asked to read for the next service, too.
Quoted from my Computers teacher: "...the big flood is coming, so you'd better be wearing goggles. If you don't, you'll be swimming blind and you'll be running into things, and that wouldn't be good."
Do you have any clue about what that quote means? He got it from a movie, I think, but I have no clue... If you have any ideas, post them... PLEASE!
Again, great job! :)

 Re: I Did It

Joined: Wed Jul 23, 2008 1:41 pm
Posts: 21
Wed Jul 30, 2008 12:08 pm
that was really short and sweet, but still good

 Re: I Did It

Joined: Mon Aug 18, 2008 9:40 pm
Posts: 19
Tue Aug 19, 2008 9:40 am
It was good. Was that it though?

 Re: I Did It

Joined: Thu Jul 23, 2009 4:05 pm
Posts: 858
Wed Feb 17, 2010 8:35 pm
Pretty short, but good!

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