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 In the Blackness (A Free verse)
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Joined: Thu Jun 23, 2016 10:57 pm
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Thu Jun 23, 2016 11:14 pm

Why, hello there! My pen-name is Aerin Benner, so you can call me Aerin or just Aer. The following is a poem I wrote for a project, it had to include 4 examples of figurative language. Of course, you don't need to care about allutions and personafications, you just need to care about my poem. Just be warned, it's a little dark. Please tell me what you think!

Blackness is like a blanket

It swallows you whole, no escaping,

In the blackness

Children cry

Demons roam

Nightmares play tricks on your mind

Black is the color of death

Waiting to sneak up and snatch you

To take you away 

 

Color is a gift

Just ask the blind

It shows us when to go 

When to stop

Color illustrates 

What's over the rainbow

 

Color is joyful

Happy

Great

But beyond color

Lies darkness




 Re: In the Blackness (A Free verse)
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Joined: Sat Feb 02, 2013 8:56 pm
Posts: 293
Mon Jun 27, 2016 10:19 pm

I really liked your poem! Great job!




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