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Please stop writing. Writing is not your thing. 11%  11%  [ 2 ]
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Why is this girl asking me these questions?!!! 11%  11%  [ 2 ]
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 Is this a hunk of trash?
visitor

Joined: Sun Aug 14, 2011 10:59 am
Posts: 218
Fri Nov 16, 2012 9:17 pm
Winter
In winter, there are noses.
Pink noses
Frozen noses
Running noses
And laughing noses.
Can noses laugh?
Why not?

In winter, there is also wind.
You know what kind of wind.
The cold kind
That makes you feel
Like your face is
Going to fall off
Until you see me
and crash into me
I miss that kind of wind
In the summer.
Why?
Why not?

In winter, I see so many stars.
White stars
Bright stars
Wishing stars
And sometimes even
Stars on the ground.
Are you a star?
Am I?


Sometimes, I will
Stay up and look at stars
And wonder
Could we be stars...
Together?


In winter, I see people
rushing around
And talking on their
Phones.
They do not see
us, or
things
or each other.
I feel bad for those people.


In winter, there are lips.
Red lips
Blue lips
One lips
Two lips
Together
And touching.
Could we touch lips?
Why not?

♥ ♥ ♥



 Re: Is this a hunk of trash?
frequent_vsitor

Joined: Mon Nov 29, 2010 12:39 pm
Posts: 971
Wed Jan 09, 2013 2:34 am
Libby! Hi! I don't know if you know me or not, but I remember you from like the Buzz Board, and I remember when you put it up on there!

This is definitely NOT "a hunk of trash". It's beautiful. Simple, sweet, to the point, yet quite meaningful too. Keep writing. I really love this one. :razz:

Love,
~Tam (harrypotterisbeast because, obviously, he is), who doesn't want to access her big fat long siggy



 Re: Is this a hunk of trash?
new

Joined: Fri Mar 08, 2013 8:47 pm
Posts: 4
Wed Mar 20, 2013 1:00 am
i love your writing it really speaks 2 me i see people don't really understand it but i do and i just want u to know keep writing don't listen 2 haters and keep on improving. : D <3



 Re: Is this a hunk of trash?
new

Joined: Sun Mar 10, 2013 9:33 pm
Posts: 2
Sun Nov 17, 2013 8:52 pm
how is this a hunk of trash!? i love it!



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