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 Lillyana Story: Part 2!!!

Joined: Thu Apr 29, 2010 10:59 am
Posts: 593
Sun Feb 19, 2012 2:25 am

To Darkdancer21:
Thank you so much for your encouragement. I almost did give up on this story, then I read your post. I'm glad that you like it.

Lillyana Story: Part 2
  Ben continued to walk down the halls, pointing out places, here and there.
"How long have you lived here?" I asked.
"Entire life."
"Do you have any siblings?"
"Prefer not to talk about it."
"No. We might get a dog."  I sighed.
"Favorite books?" I asked, desperate. He stopped walking.
"Let me show you." He brought me to a room filled with books. "Welcome, to the library!" He smiled. He went over to a shelf and took a book of the shelf.  "I've read this at least ten times."  I read the cover.
                       20, 000 leagus under the sea
"You like Jules Verne?" I asked.
"Like in an understatment." He said. "That's it for your tour. Bye." He walked off.   Well, at least I learned something.
"See you tommorrow!" I called after him. He waved and left.
End of part two

 Re: Lillyana Story: Part 2!!!

Joined: Sun Feb 12, 2012 3:42 am
Posts: 3
Tue Feb 28, 2012 10:41 am

To Hiphop

Thank you for saying that you were encourage by me it lights up my day just to know that and i do like it.

Pls write more hiphop pls?


 Re: Lillyana Story: Part 2!!!

Joined: Sat Feb 11, 2012 11:27 pm
Posts: 3
Wed Feb 29, 2012 9:21 pm

It's really good!!! Keep on writing. yescheekyenlightened

 Re: Lillyana Story: Part 2!!!

Joined: Tue May 15, 2012 7:14 pm
Posts: 2
Thu May 24, 2012 8:17 pm
keep it up

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