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 Lillyana Story: part 4!!!

Joined: Thu Apr 29, 2010 10:59 am
Posts: 593
Thu Apr 05, 2012 5:28 pm

Lillyana Story: Part 4!!!
     I woke up tired. It was Saturday. I had read for hours. Luckily I could sleep in. It got later and I started to worrry that Ben would never show up. Then I heard my mothers voice.
"'s a BOY here to see you!" It was then that I realized that I hadn't told her about Ben. I raced down stairs.
"Oh, mom..." Ben was staring at me. I looked down then turned to my mother. "This is Ben. He's in my class. We're doing a book report for extra credit." I said. My mother gave me a look.
"Well, I'm going out to the store. You kids can use the living room table." She left. I went over to the table. My book was already on it from earlier.
"Well, let's get started!"

 Re: Lillyana Story: part 4!!!

Joined: Sat Jun 09, 2012 9:43 pm
Posts: 11
Sun Jun 10, 2012 2:38 am
I've read parts 2 and 3 as well, and I'm liking this story. I don't know if it's supposed to be funny, but it is. In the end it could use expansion, make it a little slower, but it's going really well, and I'm glad your keeping it going.

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