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 Lost.
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Joined: Sun Nov 06, 2016 9:27 pm
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Sun Nov 06, 2016 11:24 pm

Heather was not feeling well. Her hair sticking uncomfortablly to her forehead and her covers felt as if they were glued to her sides. Her neck burned and her hands felt clammy. Heather could not remember how she had gotten there. She only remembered her name and one word... Piccolo. 

She sat up in her bed. Her dull brown hair puffed up behind her. "Piccolo", she whispered to herself. She swung her legs over the side. "Piccolo. Piccolo. Piccolo. Piccolo." She repeated it to herself and it turned into a sort of chant. She had the odd feeling of nostolgia, as if this had happened many times before. 

Her vivid lilac nightgown clung to her knees, and she ran to the window, hoping to spot something that would stir up her memory. "Awake again." said a voice behind her. Heather screamed. A bearded man with a fedora and a brown coat sat in the corner of the dusty, humid room. Heather clutched her chest and was comforted by the steady beat of her heart. Heather tried to tell the man she had frightened her but could only manage out... "P-p-pico-piccolo." The man nodded as if he understood her. "Yes, Heather, my name is Piccolo. You remember this. Intresting."

"Heather my dear-" he continued. "I have had this conversation with you many times, although you probably don't remember." Heather shook her head furiously. "Riddled with narcolepsey and memory loss, tsk, tsk tsk. You have been quite the project." Mr. Piccolo paced up and down the room. "Heather, come here darling, I want you to lie down on the bed." Mr. Piccolo said. Heather did as she was told, she did not like being told what to do, but she did not think Mr. Piccolo was the sort of person who people disobeyed." 

Heather did not realize how much time had passed, but after hours and hours of waiting performed by Mr. Piccolo, sitting in his firm archair, Heather awoke again. She did not have any idea of who she was but got out of bed, murmuring Piccolo to herself. Mr. Piccolo sighed, he did not know what he was to do to restore Heather back to her true state, but he was willing to do it in a heartbeat. 




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Joined: Fri Dec 02, 2016 1:57 am
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Fri Dec 02, 2016 9:58 pm

  This is so awesome! I loved it! Please keep writing! Can't wait to see a book called Lost! You have great vocab and it is very suspenceful. Keep writing!smiley




 Re: Lost.
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Joined: Sun Nov 06, 2016 9:27 pm
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Sat Dec 31, 2016 4:49 pm

Thank you so much! You're the first one to comment on my work! It means so much to me! 

 

 




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Joined: Thu Feb 23, 2017 12:23 am
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Sat Feb 25, 2017 8:25 pm

I agree with pandafairy. This is awsome! You totally need to write the rest and get it published! By the way, how did you post this? I'm trying to figure out how to post my story. It's frustrating.




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