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 My best friends birthday. please read.

Joined: Wed Jul 06, 2011 2:50 pm
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Fri Sep 23, 2011 6:07 pm
Do you remember what your best friend's birthday was like? Was it totally awesome or was it super boring? Well, this is a story about my best friends's birthday. Her name is Zemeriah.
For Zemeriah's birthday we went to an all you can eat buffet in (...)!!! We got our plates and filled them with as much food as we could take,and found some seats. She ate ribs,ice cream,jello,broccoli with cheese,and some other stuff too. I know it's crazy! She has a huge appetite! I ate chicken,fries,a slice of pizza,and a little bit of ice cream.And the weird thing is were both so skinny. Any way after that came out the chocolate BIRTHDAY CAKE!!!! Then,it was time for the birthday presents. She got alot of gifts. My present was .............blendy pens! Yes,blendy pens. Well,she WANTED blendy pens,and she really liked too!We had a really good time! And right when we were about to leave a friend of ours came walking through the door. Wasn't that a suprise. We both had a great time!

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