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 My Crazy Fifth Grade Year ~ a stage play by vivaciousaqua14
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Joined: Fri Apr 19, 2013 12:16 am
Posts: 23
Fri Apr 19, 2013 2:25 pm
(Curtain up. LILY and VANESSA are sitting on the floor of LILY's room, painting their toenails purple.)
VANESSA: Are you excited for starting fifth grade tomorrow?
LILY: If "excited" and "scared out of my mind" are synonyms, then yes.
VANESSA: C'mon, Lily, it'll be great.
LILY'S MOM: (from offstage) Vanessa! Your mom's here!
VANESSA: OK! See you tomorrow, Lily. I promise you'll have a good fifth grade year.
LILY: I doubt it. See you tomorrow.
LILY VOICEOVER: I didn't know it at the time, but I was right.
(Blackout.)

So, is it any good? TELL ME! <3, Anna



 Re: My Crazy Fifth Grade Year ~ a stage play by vivaciousaqu

Joined: Sun Nov 20, 2011 5:57 pm
Posts: 110
Fri Nov 15, 2013 2:09 am
good...keep up the work and try adding a little pit more detail and emotion:) Otherwise Good!



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