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 My life unlived, My story unheard.

Joined: Thu Mar 01, 2012 9:45 pm
Posts: 29
Mon Apr 02, 2012 9:42 pm

i guess you can say i'm evil.

i think that about myself alot.

Levi would just say that i'm being rediculous. thats why i stopped telling him things.

at the top of my list: how i feel about the things i've done.

at the top of that list: what i'm doing right now.


all my life i've followed orders. i did what they told me to, when they told me to. no questions. no back talk.

i always figured if i didnt make a fuss, i wouldn't remember, and if i didn't remember, it wouldn't come back to haunt me.

i got that big idea two years ago, status: 7 good friends, 2 good parents, 0 siblings, 0 enimies.

my current status: 0 friends, 0 parents, 0 siblings, 1 anoying (almost) adult taking care of me(if you can call it that) telling me that i need to try harder if i want to be excepted for anything, 23 enimies (so far remaining).


as you can see, it's a pretty hard life.

what i didn't know then: it was about to get alot harder.


i hope you like that short bit. i will post more later.


-Arty Blue


 Re: My life unlived, My story unheard.

Joined: Sat Jun 16, 2007 5:17 pm
Posts: 7691
Tue May 01, 2012 2:07 am
cool prologue

 Re: My life unlived, My story unheard.

Joined: Tue Oct 25, 2011 3:47 pm
Posts: 144
Wed May 09, 2012 9:10 pm
my sis has a poem called 'Unheard'.

 Re: My life unlived, My story unheard.

Joined: Sun May 23, 2010 9:08 pm
Posts: 20
Fri Jun 08, 2012 4:59 pm
i better be seeing this book soon in a library

 Re: My life unlived, My story unheard.

Joined: Sat Nov 30, 2013 3:05 pm
Posts: 3
Sat Nov 30, 2013 3:50 pm
Wow! That was awesome! Please finish and publish. Hey,when I see this book in a library I can boast that I read the original!

 Re: My life unlived, My story unheard.

Joined: Mon Jan 14, 2013 10:24 pm
Posts: 5
Fri Mar 07, 2014 12:16 am
Love it! Keep working on it! I better be seeing tho book in stores! But one piece of advice: try to make your sentences have clearer meanings, but other than that I love it! :)

 Re: My life unlived, My story unheard.

Joined: Sat May 10, 2014 5:09 pm
Posts: 2
Sat May 10, 2014 9:12 pm
I really want to know more! Keep writing like this and I would definitley pick this up in a library or bookstore.

 Re: My life unlived, My story unheard.

Joined: Wed Oct 23, 2013 10:16 pm
Posts: 173
Mon May 19, 2014 3:17 pm
great job

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