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 my poem needs help and reviews!!!
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Joined: Thu Apr 05, 2012 9:03 pm
Posts: 3
Thu Apr 05, 2012 9:52 pm

i need to know how my poem sounds for an event at my school!

I am...

I am the greatest crocodile in all the river   

But when it comes to dinner i'm not a giver!

I am the owl, the wisest of all

I soar by night and sleep by day in the tallest tree of all!

I am the mouse as tiny as can be

 I may be small but I'm just happy to be me!

 

thanks in advance!

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 Re: my poem needs help and reviews!!!
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Joined: Mon Apr 30, 2012 10:59 pm
Posts: 1
Tue May 01, 2012 11:54 pm
Dear coolcamel, I am a poet and i wanted 2 say, this is awesome!!!!!!!!!!!! ; ) keep going!



 Re: my poem needs help and reviews!!!
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Joined: Sat May 14, 2011 10:23 pm
Posts: 123
Sat May 19, 2012 9:47 pm
It's great!!! ♥



 Re: my poem needs help and reviews!!!
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Joined: Fri Jul 27, 2012 3:09 pm
Posts: 1
Fri Jul 27, 2012 4:01 pm
you a good goood jod



 Re: my poem needs help and reviews!!!
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Joined: Sat Aug 18, 2012 11:16 pm
Posts: 8
Sun Aug 19, 2012 6:08 pm
I like it. Keep up the good work ;D



 Re: my poem needs help and reviews!!!
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Joined: Sat Jul 21, 2012 1:55 pm
Posts: 435
Fri Sep 28, 2012 1:03 pm
Its not really a serious kinda poem and its got a very childish feel to it......BUT thats why it rocks! I mean its so cute and so funny :) I couldn't stop laughing...and the best part ? Even though its kiddish its got a nice meaning. Keep writing :p



 Re: my poem needs help and reviews!!!

Joined: Sun Nov 20, 2011 5:57 pm
Posts: 110
Fri Aug 23, 2013 10:22 pm
hmmm...idk but i think it needs a rythem and PIZZAZ...but a good start:)



 Re: my poem needs help and reviews!!!
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Joined: Sun Oct 05, 2014 11:54 pm
Posts: 21
Tue Oct 07, 2014 12:43 am

This poem is very nice. I like it. yes




 Re: my poem needs help and reviews!!!
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Joined: Sat May 09, 2015 8:52 pm
Posts: 6
Sun May 10, 2015 1:53 pm

I like the poem !!!!!!

, this is awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!  mail




 Re: my poem needs help and reviews!!!
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Joined: Sat May 09, 2015 8:52 pm
Posts: 6
Sun May 10, 2015 1:57 pm
Dear coolcamel, i like the poem  

 




 Re: my poem needs help and reviews!!!
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Joined: Mon Feb 16, 2015 9:40 pm
Posts: 1
Sat Nov 07, 2015 7:39 pm

WOW! This poem is great!!!!!




 Re: my poem needs help and reviews!!!
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Joined: Sun Nov 08, 2015 8:27 pm
Posts: 4
Tue Nov 24, 2015 12:28 am

Great ! Good wording . smiley I'm a poet nad I really enjoyed it .It's different , Not total rhyme but  good .




 Re: my poem needs help and reviews!!!
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Joined: Mon Dec 07, 2015 6:35 pm
Posts: 1
Mon Dec 07, 2015 7:16 pm

love you

 




 Re: my poem needs help and reviews!!!
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Joined: Sun Nov 08, 2015 12:18 am
Posts: 11
Thu Dec 17, 2015 11:39 pm

Nice! got to work on a little rym but i'm not sure i'm so good...




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