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 MY SONG

Joined: Tue Sep 09, 2008 6:37 pm
Posts: 20
Thu Jan 22, 2009 7:25 pm
 THIS IS MY SONG ITS PROLLY TERRIBLE BUT PLEASE GOOD AND BAD COMMENTS WANTED.
 
 ooooo, ooo,oo,oo,oo,
im swinging from the vine, barely hangin on!
Lookin from the outside, watchin' myself faaalll.........
I made the wrong decision,
now its come back to haunt may, ( me)
Cause i was quick, neeew it was wrong, after i tried it,
it didnt take long,
for me to know that,
ooooooo i couldnt hang on.
My hands slip down the vine,
i cant hold on any longer,
i'll miss everyone, but its to late for apologie's,
and what couldnt be
But im fallin,
OH IM FALLIN!
oh im fallin,
so who?
whoooo?
Whoo?
Will save me this time......
 
 
                      OMG THAT WAS TERRIBLE. *SNIFF*
OH WELL I JUST MADE IT UP ON THE SPOT. I CHANGED MY MIND DONT REPLY IF ITS NOT GOOD. LOL
-MAXIMUMRIDE- 



 Re: MY SONG
visitor

Joined: Sun Nov 30, 2008 4:26 pm
Posts: 74
Sat Jan 24, 2009 1:32 pm
Actually I like it... maybe with more verse and rhyme it would be better!
_SnowClaw_
If you have a dream, follow it!



 Re: MY SONG
rookie_visitor

Joined: Fri Nov 21, 2008 10:54 pm
Posts: 23
Thu Jan 29, 2009 9:04 pm
i say that good to write a song rate 1 -10 a nine



 Re: MY SONG
frequent_contributor

Joined: Mon Jun 11, 2007 12:51 pm
Posts: 7835
Sun Mar 01, 2009 4:01 pm
I loved it! I agree with bluetvbe, 1-10 it gets a 9.


SAVE THE DUDE

Kira




 Re: MY SONG
contributor

Joined: Wed Mar 11, 2009 9:00 pm
Posts: 680
Sat Mar 14, 2009 8:47 pm
I thought it was good . . . its defiantly better than anything I could write                                                       GOOD JOB!



 Re: MY SONG

Joined: Sun May 24, 2009 4:43 pm
Posts: 3
Sun May 24, 2009 4:51 pm
It's fine.  Follow your dream.




Ha.  Go on american idol!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!



 Re: MY SONG
rookie_visitor

Joined: Fri Jan 01, 2010 1:17 pm
Posts: 21
Mon Jan 18, 2010 3:31 pm
it was so amazing i was even singing it good job mrs. singer



 Re: MY SONG
rookie_visitor

Joined: Fri Jan 01, 2010 1:17 pm
Posts: 21
Sun Jun 20, 2010 1:43 pm
i lOVED IT but it kinda needs more words to it kk >D:smileytongue:  any way it was ok ur welcome




 Re: MY SONG
new

Joined: Thu May 12, 2016 2:05 pm
Posts: 50
Tue May 24, 2016 12:34 pm

OMG you should do more! yessmiley




 Re: MY SONG
new

Joined: Thu Sep 22, 2016 11:02 pm
Posts: 1
Thu Sep 22, 2016 10:50 pm

OK every one sings blubroken heart




 Re: MY SONG
new

Joined: Fri May 08, 2015 7:17 pm
Posts: 14
Thu Dec 08, 2016 1:54 am

That was amazing! Dont think it's terrible because it is way better than anything i can ever write. And i mean WAAAAAAAAYYYYYYY BETTER!!yes




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