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 Need a title for the story here c:
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Joined: Mon Dec 15, 2014 5:09 pm
Posts: 2
Mon Dec 15, 2014 5:37 pm

Space. The deep, dark abyss of the night. Where stars shimmer, and the full moon glows down on the trees that sway in the light breeze. Earth. A planet where he landed, trying to find his way home. Conalis. The planted He searched for. Seto got lost searching for Conalis, but, even better, he found friends.

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"Katnip! Come on! We need to get inside." I yelled to my sister as the sun went down "Hold on!"  she yelled inspecting something from afar "Sorrell! There's something over there!" I slipped my shoes back on and went over to her. "It's probably a soda can." I fake whacked her and playfully said, "Idiot." 

"Am NOT!"

"Am to!"

"AM NOT!"

"Am to, Katnip."

"Ughh, FINE!"

A sudden crash made us both jump and turn around "T-t-told you it was something"

"No dip, Sherlock!"

It shook, and a weird murmuring came from inside. I looked directley at a tinted window just as something came out...

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CHAPTER ONE OVER

I'll post more later next week maybe after Chrismas :3 Give me title ideas -ChocoCat OUT




 Re: Need a title for the story here c:
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Joined: Tue Dec 23, 2014 1:22 am
Posts: 209
Tue Feb 10, 2015 1:03 am

nice story




 Not enough details.
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Joined: Tue Dec 09, 2014 3:12 am
Posts: 14
Tue Feb 10, 2015 10:30 pm

This is a very short first chapter. You might want to add more details.

 

- wizardhero15

 

(Please friend me)




 Re: Need a title for the story here c:
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Joined: Fri May 29, 2015 12:36 am
Posts: 10
Sat May 30, 2015 12:18 am

Maybe call it Conalis???? Or the name of the second planet if I said it wrongsmiley

-Wittyangel37angel




 Re: Need a title for the story here c:
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Joined: Sat Jun 16, 2007 5:17 pm
Posts: 7691
Sat Apr 02, 2016 9:39 pm

you vould probably call it My Adventures if that works for you.




 Re: Need a title for the story here c:
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Joined: Wed May 11, 2016 8:01 pm
Posts: 270
Sat Jun 25, 2016 7:23 pm

WHAT?! WHY?! WHY DID IT STOP AT A CLIFFHANGER?! WRITE SOME MORE I HAVE TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS!!!!

-Dragoncrown485




 Re: Need a title for the story here c:
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Joined: Wed May 18, 2016 3:47 am
Posts: 7
Sun Oct 23, 2016 1:09 am

It's soo awesome! Keep up the good work! And some title ideas:

- Like someone already said, Cornalis (Is that the right spelling?)

- Galactic Adventure

- My Space Planet

- (Character's name)'s Space

etc. I'm sorry if these are bad or if I'm too late or something. I just want to help. smiley

Bye! 

- giddymonkey21




 Re: Need a title for the story here c:
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Joined: Sun Nov 06, 2016 9:27 pm
Posts: 31
Wed Nov 30, 2016 11:01 pm

Seto and space




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