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 need an opinion on this idea for a book, please read!
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Joined: Sun Mar 04, 2012 11:55 pm
Posts: 12
Wed Mar 07, 2012 12:11 am

the book is called Terret Rising and this is what it's about:

   Elisha lives with his Great Uncle. his parents died when one of his dad's hare-brained schemes went deadly wrong.

   Elisha visits their graves almost every day. One day he finds that their bodies (along with others in the grave yard) have been stolen by a Snatcher, the dark beasts that find and steal dead bodies for some dark and unknown reason. Rumor has it that the Snatchers have something to do with the vanishing villages in the south.

   While investigating his parent's graves a Snatcher attacks him. An unlikely person named Wenna Hale. She seems to have a strange connection to the "Qashtin," Terret's own version of magic.

   Elisha joins her on a quest to stop the Snatchers and the vanishings.

   But the planet Terret has a dark secret that just might ruin everything...

I hope that sounded okay.  please tell me honestly if this is:

   a. Predictable

   b. Horrible plot

   c. Childish

         alone forever,

            Lone Light6




 Re: need an opinion on this idea for a book, please read!

Joined: Tue Dec 06, 2011 4:05 pm
Posts: 51
Fri Mar 09, 2012 8:12 pm

oooh i really think it sounds awesome! i would suggest changing the name of the Snatchers to something different. Becuase there are groups of people in the last Harry Potter book called snatchers. But It's sounding like a really great idea!! go for it!

junoelf1




 Re: need an opinion on this idea for a book, please read!
regular_visitor

Joined: Tue Jun 28, 2011 4:07 pm
Posts: 954
Sun Apr 01, 2012 11:09 pm

oooooooo i like that idea 




 Re: need an opinion on this idea for a book, please read!

Joined: Tue Nov 16, 2010 6:55 pm
Posts: 80
Tue May 15, 2012 11:23 pm
That sounds pretty great, actually. I'd spend money on that. ~Tarochan1412



 Re: need an opinion on this idea for a book, please read!
rookie_visitor

Joined: Sun May 23, 2010 9:08 pm
Posts: 20
Mon May 28, 2012 9:58 pm
PRETTY GOOD!!! =D wish i thought of it first....continue writing but change the name Snatchers (like junoelf1 suggested) like Seizers or something...(sorry just using synonyms....)



 Re: need an opinion on this idea for a book, please read!
new

Joined: Sun Sep 02, 2012 6:28 pm
Posts: 21
Sat Dec 08, 2012 3:30 pm
I REALLY like it! Just keep in mind that there is a book called The Tiger Rising



 Re: need an opinion on this idea for a book, please read!

Joined: Tue Nov 16, 2010 6:55 pm
Posts: 80
Tue Dec 18, 2012 1:49 am
Well, well, youve certianly fleshed out that story a bit more. Again, something that Id spend money on, for sure. I can't help but think that its a bit predictable-- but in this what isnt?-- so, if I may throw a suggestion out there? Maybe... maybe the Wenna person is a Snatcher. Maybe Wenna believes she sees something in--Elisha, I believe?-- my tablets not doing so hot with the write it boards-- she sees something in Elisha, so she spares him. But there literally isn't anything special to him, so-- so-- Aaah. Forget it. I dont know. Maybe the Snatchers get to him? Do something so unspeakable that they make him special, somehow, thereby dooming themselves later? I dont know. Im totally giving up any pretense of knowing. Definately start this though. Id like to spend momey on this in the future. Nudge nudge, wonk wonk.



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Joined: Sat Jun 16, 2007 5:17 pm
Posts: 7691
Tue Aug 13, 2013 4:01 am
change the title, since there's a book called "The Dark Is Rising", and, well as for the snatchers, @junoelf, I believe it was Carrows, not Snatchers.



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new

Joined: Sun Mar 30, 2014 1:00 pm
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Mon Apr 07, 2014 12:23 pm
Awesome!



 Re: need an opinion on this idea for a book, please read!
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Joined: Sat Sep 27, 2014 2:08 pm
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Wed Dec 23, 2015 3:59 am

I think it's okay, but how is the problems of the world (vague problem, by the way) supposed to relate to the snatchers (Harry Potter term for people who collect people to make money) snatching his parents? Is this supposed to be like "We All Looked Up," where the end of the world is supposed to add some sort of urgency to the book? Or what about "Life As We Knew It" where the world was also ending, which gave the theme of, pretty much, YOLO. What is the theme really supposed to be? That's where you should start! And the background story sounds kind of boring, maybe he should live int he country and travel to the city with this snatcher-girl! It would add adventure and mysteriousness, plus plain curiosity!

P.S. What is the secret of the world? That sounds like a really big thing you need to explain and again, EXTREMEMELY vague, like seriously. I feel like you should just limit the secret thing to the snatcher-girl, like SHE has a big secret and they end up falling in love, but the secret's just too much to handle, so that puts a big risk and/or problem in their relationship!




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Joined: Sat Jun 16, 2007 5:17 pm
Posts: 7691
Sat Apr 09, 2016 4:43 pm

it sounds good, but I don't know why the Snatchers do what they do or the secret of the world.




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new

Joined: Wed May 11, 2016 8:01 pm
Posts: 270
Thu May 12, 2016 5:22 am

This book's idea is great, and I suggest (emphasis on suggest) that you also put in special information, like is there anything else in this world?, What was his dad studying?, and most importantly, why did it go wrong?




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