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 Never Let Go: Act One, Scene 1
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Joined: Tue Dec 15, 2009 5:22 pm
Posts: 3690
Mon Dec 13, 2010 7:47 pm
    Since I won't be writing that much after I finish The Choice, I decided to start writing a play! :smileyhappy:
    Here's a summary:
   Never Let Go is a dramatic script about a woman who is killed by a falling structure called “The Arc”. Kendra, the daughter, is distressed, as she believes that it is her fault that her mother died. She blames herself endlessly, until she meets a mysterious man who tells her that he can take her back into the past to change it.
   Okay! Here's Scene One!!!
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Never Let Go
Act One
Scene One
(Scene starts with 13-year old Kendra and her mother walking in city. Both have similar features- brown hair, soft, pale skin, and blue eyes. Above them, a large structure called ‘The Arc’, made of large metal pieces that extend across a few buildings. Mother is talking on cell phone, but hangs up as they get near a fountain, below the center of the structure. Both of them sit down on the fountain’s edge, and begin to converse.)
Kendra: Thanks for taking me out to New York for my birthday, Mom!
Mother: You’re welcome, sweetie. Maybe we could go out for ice cream after dinner?
Kendra: Sounds like a plan to me!
(Suddenly, a loud sound comes from above them. Kendra and her mother look up, as well as several people around them, to see that ‘The Arc’ is falling. Mother grips Kendra’s hand and begins to run.)
Mother: Run, Kendra!
(Mother and Kendra run, weaving through the masses of people in the center. Large piece of ‘The Arc’ comes down, and it is falling in Mother and Kendra’s direction. Kendra, unaware of this, continues to run directly where the metal will fall.)
Mother: KENDRA!
(Mother pushes Kendra out of the way, and she falls onto the pavement, getting a few scratches. Turns around, and to her horror, Mother is crushed underneath metal, not moving, her eyes closed.)
(People stop running, and metal stops falling. Kendra runs over to Mother and pulls her out of wreckage. Shakes Mother and holds her in her arms.)
Kendra: Mom? Mom? Mom, wake up. Wake up…
(Kendra begins to weep. She pulls her hand up to feel her mother’s pulse.)
(There was none.)




 Re: Never Let Go: Act One, Scene 1
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Joined: Fri Feb 02, 2007 11:47 am
Posts: 7216
Wed Dec 29, 2010 3:32 pm
Wow. Well that's depressing... :P


~Cavy

Happy Holidays!! :D




 Re: Never Let Go: Act One, Scene 1
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Joined: Tue Jun 08, 2010 4:25 pm
Posts: 442
Mon Jun 13, 2011 5:48 pm
boo! hoo! that almost made me cry



 Re: Never Let Go: Act One, Scene 1
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Joined: Sun Jul 10, 2011 6:08 pm
Posts: 165
Wed Sep 21, 2011 6:08 pm
That's REALLY good...
                                     i didn't cry though, 'cuz "Big girls don't cry!!!'
haha, quoting from Fergie...
o.o yeah, bye.
 
~IsisGhost3
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 Re: Never Let Go: Act One, Scene 1
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Joined: Sat Jan 28, 2012 1:25 am
Posts: 2
Sat Jan 28, 2012 8:01 pm
surprise                                                        SO DEPRESSING D;    



 Re: Never Let Go: Act One, Scene 1
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Joined: Sat Oct 17, 2009 3:27 pm
Posts: 829
Fri Feb 03, 2012 9:09 pm

 

Good work so far.

A few suggestions, you may want to have more dialogue before The Arch falls. If I were watching this on stage, there would have been a little over 45 seconds of dialogue before things start to blow up. Also, explain why she wanted to go to NYC. Where is her dad? Why did they come to see the Arch? What is the Arch? Work all this into dialogue, not parenthesis ;). Also, try and have them mention the arch before it falls. Its for-shadowing, and it allows readers to have a reason to "see it".

Otherwise, it was supper emotional, I really like you plot summary too!!!

I'm of to read the rest (is there more? I don't know...)

Oh! Could you take a look at The Drama Of Shakespeare School?

I would be ever in your debt.

Keep writing,

Jessie

 




 Re: Never Let Go: Act One, Scene 1

Joined: Sun Nov 20, 2011 5:57 pm
Posts: 110
Fri Nov 15, 2013 2:12 am
goood job i guess...its just tht u should add MORE DETAIL:) But otherwise zgooooooood



 Re: Never Let Go: Act One, Scene 1
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Joined: Fri Sep 05, 2014 8:13 pm
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Fri Sep 05, 2014 8:18 pm

cool




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