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Which is a better title (not for this story)
Too many questions, not enough answers. 14%  14%  [ 3 ]
No isn't an option. 18%  18%  [ 4 ]
Out of the wind. 18%  18%  [ 4 ]
Left for Dead. 50%  50%  [ 11 ]
Total votes : 22
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 New Story. I'm trying to think of a title! Please help me!!
visitor

Joined: Thu Mar 17, 2011 9:51 am
Posts: 102
Wed Jan 18, 2012 10:58 pm

So there I was, standing on a boat in the middle of the ocean, stranded. All I could see was water for miles and miles. My head pounding from being dehydrated. I sat down, slowly, on the floor of the boat. How I got stranded here? I don’t know. One minute I was fishing and I was pulled down in the water I fell unconscious and next thing I knew I woke up and was out in the middle of the sea. I was afraid of getting hurt by one of the fish so I started swimming frantically. I found a worn down boat floating farther and farther away from me. I swam as fast as I could to the boat. I saw a fin getting closer by the minute. Shark, I thought. I was climbing frantically but, I kept slipping down because I was climbing to fast. So I calmed down and slowly climbed up the side of the boat. I made it up in the boat and sat on the floor, soaking wet. The shark slammed into my boat making it rock back and forth. When he realized he couldn’t get me he swam off into the ocean. Now I’m stuck here with no water, no food and no life ahead of me. But then I saw a cruise ship coming toward where I was. I started waving my hands frantically and yelling at the top of my lungs. Obviously they saw me because it honked it’s horn and started to come faster my way. I stood there happily thinking, my life’s not over! I will live! As it got as close as possible I climbed in. That’s strange, I thought. There’s no one on this cruise ship. I walked around looking for the captain. I found a room with someone in it. I opened the door and shuffled in. The man turned around and stared straight at me. We were like this for a minute or so then I got the courage to ask a question “ umm why are there no people on this cruise ship?” I asked. “ Cause I found it,” the man answered. “ What do you mean you “found it?” I asked. “ This is stolen and I , am a wanted man. Police will be coming” He said calmly. I stared at him with a blank face then I ran as fast as I could away from him.

 

I could hear loud footsteps booming behind me. I was tempted to look behind me but didn’t. I was afraid he was very close to me. I didn’t think I was able to go any farther when the footsteps stopped I slowed down and looked behind me, someone was standing there but not that strange looking man I saw earlier. It was a woman, blond, very skinny and blue eyes. Her clothes, pink t-shirt and white capris pants. She ran over to me and whispered cautiously “ Hurry leave this place! It’s horrible! Leave while you can!” Then she ran off. I looked around to see if I could find her. But, she was no where to be found. It was like she disappeared into thin air. I looked over the boat into the ocean and found an escape boat. I looked around to see if I could find anyone looking at me. I jumped into the boat and unlatched the rope. The paddles were already attached so I paddled out to the sea. I tried to follow the way I came but that was nearly impossible. Suddenly I felt a magnetic pull from the ocean below. My pocket started to vibrate. Oh my gosh! I remembered I had a compass in my pocket! I pulled it out but the needle was twirling wildly. Oh no I thought. I’m in the Bermuda triangle.

 

My head was spinning and my heart was beating. I knew that the Bermuda triangle was a myth but my stomach still fluttered. I turned around the boat and rowed away.




 Re: New Story. I'm trying to think of a title! Please help m
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Joined: Tue Dec 27, 2005 9:14 pm
Posts: 1714
Mon Jan 23, 2012 5:57 pm

Fluffy giraffe, 

Could you repost this on the Short Fiction Post Work In Progress board? Normally, I would just move it myself, but the new boards don't have that feature turned on yet.

Thanks, 

Write It Mod




 Re: New Story. I'm trying to think of a title! Please help m
new

Joined: Wed Dec 28, 2011 8:53 pm
Posts: 14
Sat Jan 28, 2012 5:01 pm

how about 'stranded in the bermuda triangle'?




 Re: New Story. I'm trying to think of a title! Please help m
new

Joined: Sat Feb 04, 2012 7:42 pm
Posts: 5
Mon Feb 06, 2012 1:18 am

PHENOMENAL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  I love the imagination!  I`m  speachless!  I don`t know what to say!...........I LOVE IT!!! I DON`T KNOW WHAT TO SAY!!!!

 

                                            I LOVE IT,

                               HANNAH                                               




 Re: New Story. I'm trying to think of a title! Please help m
visitor

Joined: Sun Aug 14, 2011 10:59 am
Posts: 218
Mon Apr 02, 2012 11:55 pm

I like "Uncharted". Y' know.... for the Bermuda Triangle....

Yeah.




 Re: New Story. I'm trying to think of a title! Please help m
frequent_vsitor

Joined: Sun Mar 13, 2011 4:50 pm
Posts: 547
Wed Jun 13, 2012 11:57 pm
hm... *rubs chin* I think them all D: I can't choose!! Can i give an option :3 What about... I'm not good at Geometry, but I'm Pretty Sure This is the Bremuda Triangle! It's stupid and cheesey :D But, hey people like cheesey titles sometimes! I always love your stories! P.s. on the Fan fiction board you made a contest a while back. People are kinda bugging for you to answer back : P



 Re: New Story. I'm trying to think of a title! Please help m
regular_visitor

Joined: Wed Jul 06, 2011 2:50 pm
Posts: 297
Thu Nov 01, 2012 5:36 pm
Here are a few suggestions. 1. STRANDED! 2. ESCAPE THE TRIANGLE! I HOPE THAT HELPS! BYE!



 Re: New Story. I'm trying to think of a title! Please help m
new

Joined: Sun Nov 11, 2012 4:45 pm
Posts: 24
Sun Dec 02, 2012 3:05 pm
How about Stranded or Stuck? I would take one of those, but if you're looking for something more imaginative then probably Out to Sea or Adventure at the Triangle.



 Re: New Story. I'm trying to think of a title! Please help m
new

Joined: Tue Jan 17, 2012 11:52 pm
Posts: 2025
Fri Jan 18, 2013 8:02 pm
HOW ABOUT "THE LEGEND OF THE BERMUDA-TRIANGLE". FROM, dreamtimepink9



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