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Should I continue this story?
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 NEW STORY! Still need a title.......
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Joined: Tue Jan 26, 2016 10:20 pm
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Thu Jan 28, 2016 11:48 pm

         " Let's begin phase two of the procedure." Mara Thronewell heard the doctors whisper. She had just woken up only moments before, wondering why she was in this strange hospital. Mara quickly closed her eyes, making sure the doctors didn't know she had woken up. A few moments later, she opened her eyes again making sure the doctors weren't looking. After she made sure they weren't Mara examined the room and its surroundings.Why am I here? Thought Mara What do these people want with me? Just as she finished that thought, a voice said behind her, " It seems you're awake now, Marianna." 




 Re: NEW STORY! Still need a title.......
regular_contributor

Joined: Sat Jun 16, 2007 5:17 pm
Posts: 7691
Mon Apr 25, 2016 11:47 pm

maybe it can be called My Life or something like that




 Re: NEW STORY! Still need a title.......
new

Joined: Tue May 03, 2016 9:09 pm
Posts: 6
Mon May 09, 2016 9:16 pm

It should be called the strange room




 Re: NEW STORY! Still need a title.......
new

Joined: Tue Apr 09, 2013 11:46 pm
Posts: 30
Tue May 31, 2016 10:02 pm

This is great, very suspensful. Watch extra spaces; I noticed you had two spaces where you only needed one. Also, try to add more detail, and split it up into paragraphs. Overall, really great story! Definitely keep writing.

PD201




 Re: NEW STORY! Still need a title.......
new

Joined: Wed May 11, 2016 8:01 pm
Posts: 270
Mon Jun 06, 2016 6:29 am

Write more! PULEEEEEEEEEASE! Maybe it can be called "The Lab Rat."

-Dragoncrown485




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