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 One Song, Anyone Can Use It For Their Stories (If They Need It)
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Joined: Mon Jan 05, 2009 8:47 pm
Posts: 185
Sat Jan 10, 2009 12:35 pm
 Take My Hand
(Sing it softly and sadly)
 
Take my hand
One last step
 
Take my soul
For one last breath
 
I'll stay alive,
if you're near
 
I need you now
I need you here
 
Say you'll be mine!
And i'll be more than fine!
 
Make me smile
Like a little child
 
It'll be worth your while
 
Take my hand.....
One last breath......
 
Pull me close
For one last step
For one last breath...
 
TAKE MY HAND!



 Re: One Song, Anyone Can Use It For Their Stories (If They Need It)
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Joined: Tue Jul 29, 2008 4:51 pm
Posts: 2466
Sun Jan 18, 2009 7:46 pm
That's very good
 



 Re: One Song, Anyone Can Use It For Their Stories (If They Need It)
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Joined: Wed Dec 24, 2008 5:30 pm
Posts: 101
Wed Jan 28, 2009 12:36 pm
ahhhhh!!!!! That was soooo pretty. Do you have like guitar chords or piano notes for it? It sounds like something I would like to play.
 
From
The One The Only
Ama B.
 
Remember an idea is just an idea YOU have to give it wings



 Re: One Song, Anyone Can Use It For Their Stories (If They Need It)
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Joined: Mon Jan 05, 2009 8:47 pm
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Sat Jan 31, 2009 11:35 am


_Ama B._ wrote:
ahhhhh!!!!! That was soooo pretty. Do you have like guitar chords or piano notes for it? It sounds like something I would like to play.
 
From
The One The Only
Ama B.
 
Remember an idea is just an idea YOU have to give it wings



Actuall...I don't play guitar (electirc!), but I play piano. It might take me a week or so to come up with the notes, but as soon as I do I'll post them. Thanks for asking!
 

"One tree holds one bird, that will give birth to a miracle."

- E.L. Brandon




 Re: One Song, Anyone Can Use It For Their Stories (If They Need It)
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Joined: Mon Jun 11, 2007 12:51 pm
Posts: 7835
Sun Mar 01, 2009 4:02 pm
Can I use it in mine? It's called The Chosen Four, I dunno if you've read any of it yet but it's on the Novel Post Work board... I'd love to use it in that book, so if you think it's OK, just let me know!


SAVE THE DUDE

Kira




 Re: One Song, Anyone Can Use It For Their Stories (If They Need It)
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Joined: Mon Jun 11, 2007 12:51 pm
Posts: 7835
Sun Mar 01, 2009 4:03 pm
Oh, I might add a few verses though. Is that OK?


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Kira




 Re: One Song, Anyone Can Use It For Their Stories (If They Need It)
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Joined: Fri Aug 15, 2008 9:06 pm
Posts: 1305
Sun Mar 29, 2009 1:47 pm
    It's awesome! DolphinWriter, you should use it for Cassie's solo!
 
 

And I don't want the world to see me
‘Cause I don't think that they'd understand
When everything's made to be broken
I just want you to know who I am

-Goo Goo Dolls

Iris

 

-TwinkieBlinkie

 




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Joined: Tue Oct 25, 2011 3:47 pm
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Wed Jun 06, 2012 11:25 pm
EVANECENCE!!!!!!??????



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Joined: Mon May 07, 2012 8:04 pm
Posts: 41
Thu Jul 26, 2012 5:58 pm
I really like the song it's good! Rock on! :)



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