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 Paper Poem
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Joined: Tue Mar 01, 2016 4:23 am
Posts: 9
Tue Apr 26, 2016 5:06 am

Paper

I stare at my paper, which is blank and empty.

Unstained and unwrinkled.

Unscarred and untorn.

Not a leaf or twig to be seen.

I stare at my small piece of paper.

My paper is not very mighty.

Like the tree it once was.

Like what it no longer is.

 

I lift a pen and write on my paper.

The letters are dark and distinct.

My paper is different.

I stare at the messy sheet before me.

It is smudged with ink and covered in letters.

It is no longer clean and neat.

Like the fresh piece of paper it once was.

Like what it no longer is.

 

I pick up my sheet and fold a corner.

I crease the edge leaving a line on the sheet.

I fold and I fold the sheet until it is no longer a smudged sheet.

I have made it into a frog that leaps, a kite that flies, and all other things except for what it once was.

It is creased and folded, crumpled and wrinkled.

No longer crisp and stiff.

Like the messy sheet it once was.

Like what it no longer is.

 

The paper rests in my hand, messy and crumpled.

The wind rips it from my hand.

It drifts away, claimed by the wind.

It is no longer in my sight.

Like what it once was.

Like what it no longer is.

My piece of paper.

 

 

 




 Re: Paper Poem
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Joined: Fri Aug 01, 2014 12:15 am
Posts: 48
Fri May 27, 2016 10:10 pm

out of anything i've read so far on the poetry post progress for peer review board, this is by far the best. i love how you turned something simple (a piece a paper) into a beutiful work of art! WOW! keep posting more :)




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