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Joined: Mon Dec 28, 2015 11:01 pm
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Tue Dec 29, 2015 1:24 pm

I try my hardest to avoid this topic but it always comes up. "So, what's your dad's job?" Shaylynn asked me. I pushed off the ground on my swing and looked down at my feet. I took a deep breath, "My dad died when I was three, he had cancer, but he didn't tell anyone about it... until it was to late." Shaylynn bit her lip and looked at me, searching my expression. "I'm sorry Cary." I sighed. "It's okay, it's not your fault." 




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Joined: Wed May 11, 2016 8:01 pm
Posts: 269
Mon Jun 06, 2016 5:32 am

Ooh. You could write a heartbreaking yet life-changing story. I think it's a pretty good start.

-Dragoncrown485




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Joined: Fri Nov 04, 2016 12:17 pm
Posts: 32
Fri Nov 04, 2016 9:05 pm

Woah. Good job. 




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