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Joined: Fri Aug 01, 2014 12:15 am
Posts: 48
Fri May 27, 2016 10:35 pm

The Ways of This World

We cover up what we don’t want to see

The truth is nothing but reality

Lies now our key out of truth

The pain of this world

So much we cannot see

Blinded is what we are

We hear what we want

The rest is misery

Desires led us to a path

Never did we realize there’s an end to every beginning

And a beginning to every end

That maybe everything we think is real

Is just an illusion?

Excuses, they make up our responses

Too full of the new and better

To realize what we have

We think money is our way out

But there are many doors, not one

Its dark out

But its daytime

Somehow they seem the same

We always forget

So focused on ourselves

The reflection in the mirror

Is this who we are?

Our love is that of broken hearts

Mislead in confusion

We doubt our decisions

Were they wrong?

Or were they right?

Our questions left unanswered

Mistakes we regret

Its time to wake up

It’s not a dream anymore

There’s more to this than we think

Time more than a clock

Every breath, and then it stops

Times are changing

It’s to late to turn back

There’s something that awaits us

A new journey to begin 


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