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 Please read my poem, "Gone"
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Joined: Sat Jun 21, 2014 1:55 pm
Posts: 58
Mon Jun 23, 2014 12:03 pm

I hear her soothing hushed voice 

in the wind.

I can smell her rosy scent,

in the bloodshot roses.

I can feel the dampness of her hand 

on the wet pavement 

after it rains.

But,

I can't see her face

because she is gone.

I will never see her

because she is

dead!

She was the light admist all darkness

but now that all is lost.

I loathe the traps of death!




 Re: Please read my poem, "Gone"
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Joined: Sat Aug 04, 2012 1:34 pm
Posts: 12
Sun Aug 17, 2014 2:37 pm

awsome poems

 




 Re: Please read my poem, "Gone"
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Joined: Wed Feb 11, 2015 6:52 pm
Posts: 24
Mon Feb 23, 2015 7:14 pm

that was a pretty good poem.




 Re: Please read my poem, "Gone"
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Joined: Sat Feb 28, 2015 7:01 pm
Posts: 1
Mon Mar 02, 2015 12:37 am

That pome was awsome!




 Re: Please read my poem, "Gone"
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Joined: Sun Sep 27, 2015 1:31 am
Posts: 2
Mon Sep 28, 2015 2:03 am

Oh. My gosh.

That was amazing!!!!!!

That is so deep! loveit!




 Re: Please read my poem, "Gone"
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Joined: Sun Nov 08, 2015 12:18 am
Posts: 11
Sun Dec 20, 2015 6:46 pm

I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I is stunningly awesome. I'm copletely awstruck!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!




 Re: Please read my poem, "Gone"
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Joined: Mon Dec 28, 2015 1:20 am
Posts: 1
Mon Dec 28, 2015 1:45 am

Dude the poem is really  good. it has awsome imagery. The only thing i would really change is slightly tone down the scarry endlaugh




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