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 Poem with no title... please read and review!
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Joined: Wed Jul 29, 2015 7:05 pm
Posts: 1
Wed Jul 29, 2015 7:18 pm

So this poem doesn't have a name because I'm not very good at making names haha. It's a poem about a murderer that is insane. But this murderer only murders people because he wants a thrill and loves how it feels to be in control of someone's life, and he is just insane as I mentioned. He wants to escape the guilt of his actions but can't.  Please tell me how it was after you read it! Thanks!

 

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You dwell in the slums

Of an awe-striking village

Where arrogance resides in the air.

You look this way,

And that way,

And this way,

And that,

To find a way to escape,

Because the policeman is dead,

You're crazy in the head,

Only kill for the thrill.

But you need to escape

That abbhorent scent

The smell that lingers

In your mind that is bent.

When the opportunity arises,

You'll take it and go,

For the smell of death

Is something you sow.

 

Soooo that's the end! Tell me how it was or if you didn't understand something.

~V




 Re: Poem with no title... please read and review!
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Joined: Thu Jul 02, 2015 3:10 pm
Posts: 6
Thu Aug 20, 2015 1:24 am

That was very........... dark. blush




 Re: Poem with no title... please read and review!
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Joined: Sat Feb 27, 2016 3:10 pm
Posts: 68
Mon Mar 28, 2016 1:08 pm

That was very... deep. Your description of this place was amazing. Please write more!




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