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 Prologue of The Letters - Criticism Needed
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Fri Feb 13, 2015 6:11 pm

Sometimes, Liz would see someone that looked like Alexia Abby, or Esmé. Sometimes she would see Akash, or Tam.

 

But she knew that it couldn’t be, not after what happened. Obviously, it didn’t happen on purpose, but it happened.

 

Liz still talked to Alexia, through Liz’s thoughts and feelings. Sometimes, though not very often, Liz would just talk aloud, to the air, and she began thinking that she was talking to Alexia.

 

Liz couldn’t watch Sleeping Beauty because of the painful memories. She couldn’t watch Frozen anymore because of the painful memories. She never stepped foot into the school, not after the incident.

 

Liz knew that it wasn’t Esmé’s fault. Liz knew that she couldn’t blame Esmé for it. She never did. Liz didn’t talk to Tam or Akash, not after it.

 

The memories were too painful to bear.




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