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 rate my poem 1-10

Joined: Sat Feb 09, 2008 10:45 pm
Posts: 25
Sun Feb 10, 2008 1:55 pm
Summer eve, Summer breeze Winter time a cool cool blow.

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Joined: Fri May 18, 2007 5:54 pm
Posts: 8030
Sat Feb 23, 2008 7:33 pm
It's Ok, but a little short. It also gets a bit confusing because of where you place the commas.

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Joined: Sat Nov 10, 2007 12:21 pm
Posts: 63
Sat Mar 01, 2008 4:49 pm
summer is hot,winter is cold everybody like summer so lets get to it,summer is hot you get to be cool in the pool.

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Joined: Sun Mar 04, 2007 10:27 am
Posts: 1182
Wed Mar 05, 2008 10:51 am
It's good but it'll have to be much longer to make more sense. I like the topic- seasons.

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Joined: Mon Jul 23, 2007 3:58 pm
Posts: 822
Fri Mar 21, 2008 12:20 pm
You should repost this in Poetry, Post work in progress for peer review.  You'd get some really good reviews there! :smileyhappy:  Are you trying to make this a Haiku?  The format for a Haiku is 3 lines, the 1st line is 5 syllables, the 2nd line is 7 syllables, and the 3rd line is 5 syllables.  If you're not trying to make a Haiku, that's okay I was just wondering.
It's just a little confusing though, because you start out writing about summer, and then you switch to winter without a common link between the two parts. 
Keep working, it will be great!

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Joined: Mon Apr 14, 2008 7:53 pm
Posts: 26
Mon Apr 14, 2008 9:01 pm
I like your poem a lot!!!! :smileyvery-happy:

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Joined: Fri Nov 30, 2007 7:57 pm
Posts: 350
Thu Apr 17, 2008 2:06 pm
I'll give it 7 because it is kinda confusing when you start with summer then you go into winter.
      Peachfuzz a total bookworm

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Joined: Mon May 05, 2008 6:42 pm
Posts: 21
Mon May 05, 2008 6:52 pm
:smileyvery-happy:ill give it a 9 i think you should take out winter or summer cause that was confusing:

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Joined: Tue Jun 17, 2008 1:03 pm
Posts: 112
Tue Jun 17, 2008 11:01 pm
Its kinda confusing, so i will give it a 7 1/2.

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Joined: Tue Feb 26, 2008 4:49 pm
Posts: 371
Tue Jul 22, 2008 4:46 pm
I rate it six. It was very short and I would love to have seen more. I'm not much of a poem writer myself so most of my work would have been a five but yours is a lot better.
6 1/2
...(I changed my mind)...
...(Just a quick poem I just wrote up)...
...Changing Seasons...
Seasons change,
but the heart does not.
...It isn't enough to believe...
...You have to save...

 Re: rate my poem 1-10

Joined: Fri Sep 25, 2009 4:38 pm
Posts: 98
Mon Jan 24, 2011 6:38 pm
Rating: four and a half
Reasons: it is short
                add some decriptions like

Summers crisp eve

summer breezes through quickly like the wind

winter time comes in like a flash

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Joined: Mon Apr 30, 2012 3:13 pm
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Sat May 05, 2012 8:12 pm

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Joined: Fri Jun 01, 2012 2:13 am
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Fri Jun 01, 2012 3:32 am
loved it!!!! i would so give it a big 10 everyday cause it is so great!!!!! :) :)

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Joined: Mon May 07, 2012 7:39 pm
Posts: 57
Mon Jun 11, 2012 8:01 pm
I would rate it a 4. It's not that I didn't like it. It's just really short and it doesn't follow the format of any type of poems I know, like a haiku. Keep working on it though. It has the potential to be made into a 10! Good luck with your writing!

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Joined: Mon May 07, 2012 8:04 pm
Posts: 41
Thu Jul 26, 2012 5:56 pm
I'll give u a 6. It's alright, keep working on it. :)

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Joined: Sat Mar 16, 2013 4:24 pm
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Thu Mar 28, 2013 1:34 pm
I give you an 8. Keep working on it!

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Wed Oct 23, 2013 2:03 pm

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Joined: Sun Nov 20, 2011 5:57 pm
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Sun Nov 24, 2013 9:23 pm
hmmm 7 but with practice it will be great!

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Joined: Fri Mar 06, 2015 5:49 pm
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Mon Jun 08, 2015 4:41 pm


All the words are clumped together! I can understand it, though!smiley

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Joined: Wed May 11, 2016 8:01 pm
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Wed May 25, 2016 4:19 pm

I'd give it a 9. I like how you made it feel like it was Summer, and then Winter just...came. I'll give you a short poem.

The birds are flying in from the south,

Spring is in the air.

Butterflies and Bees are flying around,

Summer is in the air.

The birds flap their wings and fly again to the south,

Fall is in the air.

Everything is covered in a blanket of snow,

Winter is in the air.

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Joined: Sun Feb 28, 2016 1:03 pm
Posts: 32
Sun Sep 18, 2016 7:45 pm

8 out of ten.  I wish it was longer, but I still likeyes

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Joined: Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am
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Thu Jun 08, 2017 5:40 pm

It is a 5 because it is good but a little bit confusing

coolgreat job and plus how good you think it is is what really matters .

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