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 "Smiles" A series of haikus.
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Joined: Fri Oct 25, 2013 9:57 pm
Posts: 85
Sun Nov 24, 2013 7:32 pm

"Smiles"


How would it be if
We went back to the old town
Where you were happy.

I miss you smiling
You would always emit a
Sunny warmth, all day.

You can almost feel
The brightness, cheer hovering
Above in the air.

Honesty is hard,
But, I miss smiles, always will.
And what have I, now?

I have learned that a
Frown is close, but inexact,
And nothing can pass-
Compare, Is the word.
But most words have left me, so
"Smiles" is the one I...

Need.


--B e a s t l y F i r e 49


Nah, you don't kn ow me. Lightning abo ve and a fire be low me.You cann ot catch me, can not hold me.You can not stop, much less control me.
~ Mike Shinoda.



I'm just saying for once, I'm putting myself first, putting myself first, putting myself first.
--Skylar Grey.



 Re: "Smiles" A series of haikus.

Joined: Sun Nov 20, 2011 5:57 pm
Posts: 110
Mon Nov 25, 2013 2:55 am
nice...really goood



 Re: "Smiles" A series of haikus.
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Joined: Fri Oct 25, 2013 9:57 pm
Posts: 85
Thu Dec 12, 2013 10:34 pm
@aquaheart thank you very much!

✧ B e a s t l y F i r e 49 ✧





 Re: "Smiles" A series of haikus.
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Joined: Sun Oct 13, 2013 1:57 pm
Posts: 6
Sat Dec 21, 2013 11:21 pm
great! :) :) :) :) :)



 Re: "Smiles" A series of haikus.
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Joined: Sun Dec 09, 2012 1:23 am
Posts: 3
Wed Apr 30, 2014 10:17 pm
Cool! I'm pretty sure that's good enough to blow anyone away!;]



 Re: "Smiles" A series of haikus.
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Joined: Thu May 22, 2014 12:15 am
Posts: 356
Thu May 22, 2014 8:50 pm

awesome, really great you should keep writing haikus




 Re: "Smiles" A series of haikus.
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Joined: Thu May 22, 2014 12:15 am
Posts: 356
Wed Aug 27, 2014 7:32 pm

This was my very 1st post.....ooooo....it feels so good to be back. C u guys around.




 Re: "Smiles" A series of haikus.

Joined: Wed Jun 15, 2011 5:24 pm
Posts: 61
Fri Nov 14, 2014 11:32 pm

Great!




 Re: "Smiles" A series of haikus.
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Joined: Sun Dec 21, 2014 9:57 pm
Posts: 1
Sun Dec 21, 2014 11:44 pm

that was beautiful smiles are meant to be shared with beautiful lights and cheers hope you keep going on because life without a smile could go wrong




 Re: "Smiles" A series of haikus.
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Joined: Thu Feb 26, 2015 5:42 pm
Posts: 3
Fri Feb 27, 2015 6:41 pm

Lovely!! Please keep writting, perhaps we could collaborate something sometime!

~Keep writting~

smiley




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Joined: Sat Mar 14, 2015 9:15 pm
Posts: 1
Sat Mar 21, 2015 12:02 am

i like that. it tells me a lot how smiles are not to disapear. they are to stay when you are happy . and so you sould always be smiling.

heart  Savanna 




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Joined: Tue Jun 09, 2015 4:54 pm
Posts: 1
Wed Jun 10, 2015 2:52 pm

That was spectacular! You can grow up to one amazing poet one day!smileyyes




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Joined: Fri Nov 20, 2015 9:16 pm
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Fri Nov 20, 2015 10:44 pm

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Joined: Wed Feb 17, 2016 12:28 am
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Wed Mar 02, 2016 9:25 pm

SUPERB! heartheartheartheartheartheart




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