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 Soldiers on the sunrise (to be continued)

Joined: Thu Apr 16, 2015 8:42 pm
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Tue May 19, 2015 12:32 pm

I lay down in the smooth meadows of Ciruns, the sun rained down and coated the land in a bright gold. The same color as my hair and freckled skin. I rolled in the grass til my hair was covered in long pieces of the wheat surrounding me. "Are! Where are you?" my brother asks teasingly. A giggle escaped my lips as he bounds over and picks me up, swinging my like a small ragdoll. I laugh openly and I hug him close. "I will miss you." I say. "I know you will, but I have to fight." He was dressed in a brown jacket with pants bleached a camofloged green. His eyes were almost covered by his shaggy blonde hair. I stand on my toes and whisper "Dont forget me." before he slowly walks back into the sunrise. I waved as a tear rolled down my cheek, I had a sinking fear that I would not see him again alive. I would be going to the same battle but working a different job. I'm a trained medic and most times called "Wheat" because of my gold hair. I was known by everyone, partly because I was the only girl in the whole camp. I was raised here  as a baby and have made friends with most, losing some to the war as well.

 Re: Soldiers on the sunrise (to be continued)

Joined: Mon Dec 28, 2015 11:01 pm
Posts: 13
Tue Dec 29, 2015 9:25 pm

this is awesome! please continue the story!!!!

 Re: Soldiers on the sunrise (to be continued)

Joined: Sat Feb 27, 2016 3:10 pm
Posts: 68
Fri Mar 25, 2016 8:58 pm

Nice story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! please continue...

 Re: Soldiers on the sunrise (to be continued)

Joined: Wed May 11, 2016 8:01 pm
Posts: 270
Sat Jun 25, 2016 6:33 pm

Very cool. Might make millions. Continue the story!


 Re: Soldiers on the sunrise (to be continued)

Joined: Thu Jul 14, 2016 11:12 pm
Posts: 27
Fri Jul 22, 2016 5:10 pm

Sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo cool!!!

 Re: Soldiers on the sunrise (to be continued)

Joined: Thu Feb 23, 2017 12:23 am
Posts: 18
Sun Feb 26, 2017 7:15 pm

You totally need to finish and publish it!!!!!!!!! Keep up the good work!

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