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 Some Poems
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Joined: Tue Mar 01, 2016 4:23 am
Posts: 9
Fri Mar 04, 2016 2:58 am

I need feed back on some poems...

A Writer’s Worries

What moment to write of,

there are simply so many.

I have an idea,

but of perspectives there are plenty.

The time that was the best,

or the time that was the worst?

The time that was the last,

or the time that was the first?

 

What lesson is to be learned,

one of family or of life?

You can kill someone with kindness,

or march to the tune of your own fife.

What tone should be set,

one that is somber or one of rejoice?

There are so many possibilities you can easily use,

but which is best one for the theme of your choice?

 

Of words and phrases,

the options are infinite.

But the best possible versions,

are undoubtedly limited.

What word suits which sentence,

what adjective what noun.

It must be perfect in tone for its part,

but let’s not forget in rhythm and sound.

 

The work is never done,

easily improved,

but you must trust yourself,

and the words you chose.

 

Shop Windows of the Soul

The eyes are the windows of the soul,

the shop windows of the soul.

Window displays ever shifting,

window displays ever changing.

Always showing you what you “need” when they want to,

the same eyes that plead when they want to.

The same eyes that can cry when they want to,

can be the same ones saying good bye when they want to.


Open the door,

look behind that shop window.

Look at what has been shoved to the back,

never to be on display.

You must look at the bad things,

just as you must look at the sad things.

Take notice of the old things,

and of course the never sold things.


Look at what is behind that shop window,

before you buy based on what’s on display.

There is more depth to that shop than the things in the windows,

for there are no windows leading to its heart or soul.

You might think you see yourself through that window,

but it might just be its surface.

Look behind that shop window for what is real,

if you don’t you’ll soon realize who got the better deal.

 

Words of the People

Pen dancing,

across the page,

ink flowing,

words forming,

on the page,

the page before us.

 

Words long,

words short,

words of all,

shapes and types,

on the page,

the page before us.

 

Different meanings,

different letters,

some alike,

but none the same,

on the page,

the page before us.

 

Words for every person,

but not a person for every word,

together writing a message,

read and heard by all,

onto the page,

the page just before us.

 

Sisters

Annoying at times,

Even more so at others.

It is just the way things are.

 

All sisters remember the times.

They asked their mothers,

Can they be returned?


Only they are non-refundable,

Or you’re a package deal.

But who would want them back?

 

On the days you wonder what if you never had one at all,

Just remember it could have been worse.

You could have had a brother.

 

 

I hope you didn't dislike the poems too much... Sorry if you think reading this is a waste of time. Thanks for any feedback!

 

 




 Re: Some Poems
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Joined: Wed Feb 17, 2016 12:28 am
Posts: 31
Mon Mar 07, 2016 11:31 pm

LOVE IT! I THINK IT"S GREAT. LEAVE FEEDBACK FOR ME TO!




 Re: Some Poems
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Joined: Fri Aug 01, 2014 12:15 am
Posts: 48
Sat May 28, 2016 8:44 pm

WOW. thats all i need to say. 




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