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 Song - World of a Dream by Hermione524
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Joined: Wed Sep 30, 2009 2:38 pm
Posts: 485
Sun May 23, 2010 12:23 pm
OK, there's no song board, so I'll just post songs here. Here's a song I wrote called "World of a Dream",

Every winter evening
Watch the snowflakes fall
My mind is elsewhere
As I stare at the wall
I wonder when I'll wake up
To reality's call
When I do, hit the snooze
And go back to the world of a dream

Every night
The stars will shine
And that is when it happens
When I draw the line
I've gotta stop pretending
That this world is mine
Don't you see, it's not for me
I've gotta go back to the world of a dream

I feel like I'm different from everyone
No one else dreams all the time
Standing in the light of the sun
I know I'm not the only one

So who else is out there
That is just like me
Imprisoned in a world
That is not what they see
We're the only ones
That still believe
Hope you liked the show, but I've gotta go
Gotta go back to the world of a dream


Tell me what you think of it! :smileyvery-happy:



 Re: Song - World of a Dream by Hermione524
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Joined: Sun Apr 25, 2010 3:34 pm
Posts: 429
Thu Jun 10, 2010 8:25 am
Wow-that is really good! I'm not just saying that either :)



 Re: Song - World of a Dream by Hermione524
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Joined: Sat May 01, 2010 2:46 am
Posts: 133
Sun Jul 04, 2010 11:11 pm
OMGOSH!  i love it i sang it in a certain tune of mine and oooooooo it was awesome!



 Re: Song - World of a Dream by Hermione524
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Joined: Tue Mar 02, 2010 6:45 pm
Posts: 277
Fri Jan 21, 2011 9:13 pm
I like it. :robothappy:

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 Re: Song - World of a Dream by Hermione524

Joined: Mon May 30, 2011 4:11 pm
Posts: 13
Wed Aug 31, 2011 5:28 pm
very good.



 Re: Song - World of a Dream by Hermione524

Joined: Mon Sep 26, 2011 2:14 pm
Posts: 10
Sun Nov 13, 2011 1:22 pm
awesome I understand what it's about man that's awesome that you think just like me. ROCK ON SISTER!! :)



 Re: Song - World of a Dream by Hermione524
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Joined: Sun Jul 10, 2011 6:08 pm
Posts: 165
Sat Jan 28, 2012 12:29 am

I love it. ;) And, if you're one of those people that thinks they're alone in that... you're not. We are one and the same. I know what it feels like to be alone. And, if anyone's reading this that feels like that... you're not, okay? That's what we're here for. ;) Comment me if you have to.

Livin' like kings with broken strings and the beats so synthesized!!! XD




 Re: Song - World of a Dream by Hermione524

Joined: Tue Oct 25, 2011 3:47 pm
Posts: 144
Wed Jun 06, 2012 10:29 pm
@hermione524 & isisghost3, i'm gonna hold a contest for songs, and for the ones i like most, i'm gonna put up on youtube.
i'll start a thread for you guys (and any one else who wants to enter) to post the songs you want to use.



 Re: Song - World of a Dream by Hermione524
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Joined: Sun Oct 17, 2010 5:23 pm
Posts: 123
Sun Jul 29, 2012 8:41 pm
i love it!



 Re: Song - World of a Dream by Hermione524
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Joined: Thu May 12, 2016 2:05 pm
Posts: 52
Tue May 24, 2016 12:21 pm

Perfect! I am always in the world of dream! laugh




 Re: Song - World of a Dream by Hermione524
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Joined: Wed May 11, 2016 8:01 pm
Posts: 269
Sun Jun 26, 2016 12:15 am

This song totally defines me. Excepting a few perks, of course.

-Dragoncrown485




 Re: Song - World of a Dream by Hermione524
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Joined: Sat Jan 02, 2016 2:22 am
Posts: 26
Mon Aug 01, 2016 3:29 pm

omg you're so good at writing songs! i'm glad to know i have my fellow song writers on here.

yes




 Re: Song - World of a Dream by Hermione524
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Joined: Fri Nov 04, 2016 12:17 pm
Posts: 32
Mon Dec 05, 2016 12:15 am

Awesum




 Re: Song - World of a Dream by Hermione524
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Joined: Thu Jan 01, 1970 12:00 am
Posts: 16
Tue Apr 18, 2017 1:18 pm

OMG, just so u know I really want to become a singer/song writter and you're inspiring me a lot! I might just write a song on here too. yes




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