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 Story I'm writing, i need suggestions. :)
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Joined: Sun Nov 08, 2015 12:18 am
Posts: 11
Thu Dec 17, 2015 11:35 pm

Here is my poem :

A sword of fire,

a dagger of ice,

Made from scerets dew.

A soul revived from mist,

To make an old heart new.

A solemn prayer beneeth the stars

A breath of now cold fire.

And little bud anew,

From which she will retire. 

 

 

 




 Re: Story I'm writing, i need suggestions. :)
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Joined: Fri Jun 10, 2016 7:37 pm
Posts: 1
Fri Jun 10, 2016 8:32 pm

This is a good poem, but I think you should just work on your spelling. laugh




 Re: Story I'm writing, i need suggestions. :)
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Joined: Wed May 11, 2016 8:01 pm
Posts: 270
Tue Jun 14, 2016 1:14 am

Ooh. Maybe it can be sme sort of prophecy or a legend in a book.

-Dragoncrown485




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