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do you like this idea?
it's amazing! 27%  27%  [ 4 ]
yes 20%  20%  [ 3 ]
it's good, but I have suggestions 53%  53%  [ 8 ]
it's ok 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
no 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
Total votes : 15
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 story idea! I need feedback!

Joined: Mon Dec 02, 2013 5:31 pm
Posts: 51
Tue Dec 10, 2013 5:15 pm
I have a story idea. It's about a girl who lives on the streets and is poor and an orphan. One day she took a bus and it turns out the bus driver is an alien and took her to his home planet. He lives on the bad side of the planet but drops her off accidentally on the good side of the planet. She makes friends with the creatures on the good side and they have to defeat the aliens on the bad side. So do you like this idea? Please give me some feedback.

 Re: story idea! I need feedback!

Joined: Mon Dec 02, 2013 5:31 pm
Posts: 51
Tue Dec 17, 2013 12:40 pm
please!!!!!! I need feedback!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :(

 Re: story idea! I need feedback!

Joined: Sun Nov 20, 2011 5:57 pm
Posts: 110
Fri Jan 03, 2014 4:25 pm
really good idea just add more details. But its a really good thought! keep up the great writing

 Re: story idea! I need feedback!

Joined: Fri Sep 20, 2013 12:55 am
Posts: 18
Sat Jan 11, 2014 7:26 pm
It's great, but you should add more details to the bus driver part :)

 Re: story idea! I need feedback!

Joined: Sun Feb 09, 2014 7:57 pm
Posts: 57
Mon Feb 24, 2014 9:39 pm
This is a really cool idea, and maybe, just maybe, add a little bit more detail. But otherwise, it's really creative and cool, especially how surprised the girl must've been when she might've saw him in a battle, but if you don't have that part in mind, I personally think it would be really cool!

 Re: story idea! I need feedback!

Joined: Wed Apr 23, 2014 7:21 pm
Posts: 1
Tue Jun 03, 2014 3:50 pm
its not bad i mean i love it a lot u need to become a writer

 Keep up the great work!!!

Joined: Wed Jul 09, 2014 12:28 am
Posts: 12
Tue Aug 05, 2014 6:56 pm

Its a really great  thought and withsome more workit could be amazing! For the most part, its a good idea!!!smiley

 Re: story idea! I need feedback!

Joined: Sat Aug 22, 2015 12:26 pm
Posts: 75
Mon Nov 09, 2015 4:27 pm

You just need to put some more creativity

 Re: story idea! I need feedback!

Joined: Wed May 11, 2016 8:01 pm
Posts: 270
Wed May 25, 2016 4:34 pm

She could recover a teleportation device. Or an energy sword, and...ooh! what if she found a time travel device!?

 whats up

Joined: Mon Nov 28, 2016 7:07 pm
Posts: 3
Tue Nov 29, 2016 3:52 pm

hay every one im newlaugh

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