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What do you like to do at the beach?
Surf and swim in the ocean 40%  40%  [ 2 ]
Tan 20%  20%  [ 1 ]
Lay down and watch the sunset 0%  0%  [ 0 ]
Build sandcastles 20%  20%  [ 1 ]
Walk along the sand 20%  20%  [ 1 ]
Total votes : 5
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 Sunset Island~Page 1

Joined: Thu Mar 03, 2016 11:06 pm
Posts: 5
Sat Mar 05, 2016 2:15 am

Chapter 1 

I stepped on the wet, cold sand. I could hear the waves crashing before me. I smiled, then closed my eyes. Then a huge wave crashed onto shore and took me riding on it as it came back to the sea. I fell in the freezing ocean. I swam up and opened my eyes. I could see my sister staring at me in shock. She was wearing a short blue dress and her hair was so pretty and wavy. I swam to her and said, "Hello Misa." when I got to her. 

  "I can't believe you let yourself get washed up!" Misa exclaimed surprisingly. "Are you THAT crazy?" I just giggled and then ran to our wooden cabin. I swung open the door and ran in, trailing the floor with salty water from my red dress as I came in.

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