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 The Crystal Butterfly
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Joined: Wed Feb 17, 2016 12:28 am
Posts: 31
Thu Jun 30, 2016 1:48 pm

      Imagine, a crystal butterfly, so colorful and enchanting, just begging you to take it. Now, imagine the person trying to take it. That's me. No I'm not a thief. Ok, maybe, I am, but I didn't get away with the butterfly. Wait, maybe I should start from the beginning.

     My name is Lacey Abbot. I am 12, and I live with my mom and dad and little brother. I like to read and would not have heard about the butterfly except from a book about weird facts. I was so facinated by that fact. I showed my friends. Thinking back, they looked suspiciously like bad girls. They wore black makeup, black shirts, black sneakers, black everything. Yet I wasn't suspicious. They asked me where it was. As I started giving the coordinates, they told me, that since I know where it is, go find it. 




 The Crystal Butterfly Part 2
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Joined: Wed Feb 17, 2016 12:28 am
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Sat Jul 02, 2016 2:48 pm

        So I am packing all my items I would need for the journey. An extra change of clothes, some energy bars, they book where I found that fact, and some more miscellaneous items. Then I told my mom I was going to a sleepover at one of my friend's houses. I headed for the bus.                                                                                                                                                                         When I got to the bus stop, there were a lot of people. So i just minded my own buisness and kept walking. I came to a more empty bus stop. I sat down on the bench. The bus arrived. Now I know why nobody was at the bus stop. The bus was black and eerie. I didn't want to go in. But I had to to. I needed to see the butterfly, take a picture. So i got on. The driver looked like a zombie. I wondered about the bus. I realized I was sitting on a bed. So I fell asleep....




 Re: The Crystal Butterfly
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Joined: Thu Jul 14, 2016 11:12 pm
Posts: 27
Fri Jul 15, 2016 1:34 am

It's a cool story, but you need to be more descriptive and have more conversation.




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