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 The Guys in An Airplane

Joined: Sat Jul 17, 2010 9:32 pm
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Sun Aug 08, 2010 9:59 am
The Guys in An Airplane        
On Tuesday, at an airport, maybe even the one in the town you live in, three men and one 14 year old boarded a small aircraft to take them to the Nobel Peace Prize Award Ceremony. The first man was the pilot, who had to be there or the plane would go nowhere. The second was the Smartest Man in the World, or so he thought, and since he was the smartest, everyone believed him. The third man was the Oldest Priest in the World, and he was going to Haiti to help out after the award ceremony. The 14 year old was nobody special, just an average, wimpy boy who happened to get lucky and win a sweepstakes for this ride. He had his backpack slung over his shoulder and tossed it over where the parachutes were.
        They sat down, the plane got clearance to leave, and it took off. Maybe 15 minutes later the pilot came out of the cockpit. "The plane is going down." He said in his gravelly voice, looking rather disheveled in his jeans and rumpled red t-shirt. "There are two more parachutes. Decide amongst yourselves who gets them." And The pilot leaped out of the plane. The Smartest Man in the World stood up and announced in his arrogant, pompus voice with his nose in the air (he had NO friends) "I am too important for the world to lose." and he grabs one and leaps out. Now the priest turns to the 14 year old, and says in a solemn voice, "Now son, I have lived a full, long life and you have your whole life ahead of you. I want you to take this last parachute." The boy replies in a cracking voice, "I appreciate that, but it's okay. You will make it to Haiti, you know unless something happens, other than this, to you. You know that smart guy and how he said he was too important for the world to lose?" The priest gave him a strange look and nodded. The boy continued. "Yeah. He took my backpack." This (i don't know how he managed this) was said with a perfectly straight face. The priest looked ober where the parachutes were, his mouth crinkled into a smile and then they both started laughing hysterically. When the priest had caught his breath, he said, "That's good. I didn't really want to die yet, and if we don't get a move on we will anyway!" So they both grabbed parachutes and jumped out.

Message Edited by _purplepancakes98_ on 08-14-2010 11:04 PM

 Re: The Guys in An Airplane

Joined: Wed Jun 01, 2011 8:14 am
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Fri Jun 03, 2011 8:23 am
dat t'was funny!!!:smileytongue:

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 Re: The Guys in An Airplane

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Sun Jan 22, 2012 6:05 pm


 When the ordinary boy put his backpack where the parachutes went I kinda new where that was going, lol! 

 Re: The Guys in An Airplane

Joined: Sun Jul 10, 2011 6:08 pm
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Sat Feb 25, 2012 2:37 am

XD THAT'S HILARIOUS!!!!! I'm fighting the urge to laugh out loud because my Aunt is right behind me, sleeping in the recliner... (UH-OH!!! *pause in snoring*....... *snoring continues* Oh. Okay.), sooo..... AWESOME!!! XD!!!

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