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 The Hiccuping Weirdo: a short story
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Joined: Mon Mar 26, 2012 8:37 pm
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Thu Apr 26, 2012 9:48 pm

Here is my short story ( I'm only good at writing short stories). So... I hope you like it!

 

     The Hiccuping Weirdo

          I woke up, ,just a normal morning, or so I thought. Little did I know everything was about to change. I slept in ( as usual) and then missed my bus ( as usual). Once I got to school I hurried to homeroom, getting there JUST before the bell rang. The day whizzed by and soon it was time for lunch.

           At lunch I gulped down my juice and got the hiccups. After hiccuping a couple times my friend, Tara said, " Hey, Emily, you just, like... grew!"

           " Uh... I gotta go." I say, then walk out. As I walk down the hall I bump into John Roberts, captain of the football team.     "Hey, Emily,...you look taller." he says. " H-h-hi, John." I manage to stammer. Then hurry into the bathroom before I hiccup again. As I stand in front of the mirror I hiccup again. I DEFINITELY grew taller! Above all the questions in my head one stands out the most. What will happen to me?

   THE END!

So.. did you like it? I NEED FEEDBACK!!!!!!!

 

 




 Re: The Hiccuping Weirdo: a short story
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Joined: Mon Apr 30, 2012 12:49 pm
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Tue May 15, 2012 7:23 pm
its good, but it definitely needs more detail. and the name is not very appealing. but the storyline is great!



 Re: The Hiccuping Weirdo: a short story
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Joined: Thu Sep 27, 2012 1:03 am
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Sun Sep 30, 2012 5:17 am
lol very funny!!!



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