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 The In Beween

Joined: Thu Nov 24, 2016 2:28 pm
Posts: 9
Thu Nov 24, 2016 4:30 pm

Chapter1                      Loretta Tina NoPart was in the clinic,helping her mother with all the sick animals.Their clinic was just bursting with customers,since the war started,the animals did not have many people     around to take care of them.Many of the owners died,leaving the animals to get sick,starve and even die!When all the people were gone,Loretta climbed up the stairs, went to her           typewriter,and started to write.


Summer.She wrote.

Still the ugly gray-brown summer.War.The word makes me shiver.Dread.I hate the word,but still the word consumes me.It was not long after she had started writing when she heard feet coming up the stairs."Lights out."her mother said in her soft voice."Okay."whispered Loretta.

 Re: The In Beween

Joined: Sun Nov 06, 2016 9:27 pm
Posts: 31
Tue Dec 27, 2016 4:11 pm

um... maybe you should check your spelling and/ or your punctuation. 

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